OC Character Thread 2 (This thread is now locked, please use the OC Character Thread 3 above)

Name: Vipera Sanies.

Race: Originally a Unicorn, now a hybrid of pony and snake, due to an accident.

Age: 19.

Mane: Long, lush, glossy black, slightly curly.

Coat: Dark, sage green.

Cutie mark.: A shining dagger, dripping a light green liquid from the tip.

Extra details that aren’t needed but are nice to add: Toxic green eyes.

Distinguishing Features: Her left eye, which is solidly toxic green(whites and iris gone, replaced by a single color.) and has a reptilian pupil. Her fangs, forked tongue, and her now omnivorous nature. Vipera is also very pretty.

Specialty (eg. special spells, unique powers etc): She kept a lot of cobra when the spell that turned her into a snake went wrong. Very flexible, extremely fast, and has mildly neurotoxic saliva, which makes movement sluggish and difficult, clouds the mind. She also has knowledge of many venoms and their natural antidotes. Immunity to all venoms, but not plant-based poisons. Also good with her knives, but not a great fighter.

Weaknesses: Does not do very well in extreme heat or extreme cold. Sometimes goes near berzerk when called a 'Freak' or 'Monster', but can control herself better than the first few weeks of being a hybrid. Not the strongest, or the most endurant.

Occupation: Canterlot Noble.

Gear: Several types of poisons and antidotes to those poisons. Two stilettos, both silver, both enchanted to be extremely sharp and endurant. A simple silver circlet, given to her by her father. She has a pendant in the shape of a heart that allows her to channel the mana she no longer has the natural ability to channel. Sometimes wears a black cloak.

History: Vipera was born in Canterlot, raised in Canterlot, and has never set hoof outside the city, having somewhat of a sheltered life. Vipera was originally adept at focusing her magic around to detect all form of poisons and venoms, but when she was eighteen, a friend had asked for her help in practicing transformation spells. It went well originally, Vipera being successfully turned into a cobra, but then it went wrong, when she was turned back, it was incomplete, Vipera keeping some of the cobra's likeness. After a year, she began to accept her new look, but still missed her horn, though her body regularly generates mana as it would if she was still a regular unicorn. She eventually got a pendant to allow her to use magic again, but it hasn't been long enough to get used to it. Vipera still gets fed up with insults all around by other nobles, but has gotten used to it, and rarely gets angry anymore. She currently takes care of her manor when her parents are not home, for they rarely are, and takes company with her pet python, Delores. Vipera rarely goes out.

Personality: Kind, gentle, strong-willed, but when someone insults her or a friend, they shall meet her blades, or she will get them back in a different way. Sometimes shy.

Current Home: Canterlot.

Misc: Gets very lonely.

[Newly revised because I'm a Grammar Nazi]

Zen wrote:

Name: Maple

Approved, with bells on! O_O

KoreanLuna wrote:

Name: Bellatrix
Specialty: Combat, hunting, multilingual, magic, immunity to evil (this last one is from genetics, and it is NOT always good)

She's all of these things by 12? Um, no.

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Gear: All manners of armor and weaponry; also, amulets. But she has no signature tool.

All manners of armor and weaponry? Signature tool? This stretches credulity to the breaking point...


OK, this character does not work. She's too powerful, too well-equipped, and you invented this designation for her that makes her special. You need to revise these things to make her much less powerful and much more matching the intellect and ability of a 12-year-old.

StrawberryGamer wrote:

Name: Viola

Approved.

BronzeFog wrote:

Name:Vipera Sanies

Approved.

Name: Moonlight Hunter.
Race:Earth Pony
Age:22-25
Mane:Dark as the night sky with a orange outline and a slight red glow. Its in a very poofy curly style.
Coat:Slight Dark black with Brown on the outside and the black going from his neck to his stomach while the brown covers the rest.
Cutie Mark:A hat like the one he wears.
Distinguishing Features:The black and red glowing top hat on his head plus his strange glowing coat and mane.
Speciality:Able to raise the dead and control them or give them free will, immune to certain injuries.
Weaknesses:Being a idiot,Very random,Not very strong or fast or skilled, did I mention he's a idiot?.
Occupation:Ruler of the Undead Kingdom.
Gear:Black top hat housing a evil spirit that gives him the power to raise and control the dead.
History:His growing up is unknown nor if he has family but he did stumble upon a mass grave for a ancient war over a magicial hat that could grant the user great power. He found a hat near a sign warning him not to put on the hat and put it on his head getting it permantly stuck. Deciding he could raise the dead despite no evidence supporting this he spent a year building a castle out of dead wood, tombstones and bones and his throne out of coffins and tombstones. After this grueling work was done he rose the dead to fill his kingdom though in hindsight he could a just had them build his castle in probably a week then him taking a year. His slav- err... 'Democracy Granted Citizens Who Are Slaves'(Trademarked by I made a trademark company co. A buisnesse opened by Moonlight) 'voted' him into eternal monarchy/dicatorship power. He began building a large town and practicing musical intros for the possible television series based on his life but then decided to go to Canterlot for politics or 'A follow tick' as he called it. He had great diplomacy using the foolproof stragye of screaming random words at the royals and selling crayon drawings of his kingdom, yet this failed and he returned home getting a seven headed hydra to guard his castle, several adult dragon body guards and three mistresses chosen from the LEAST decomposed corpses he continued to rule then after falling in his lava river that ran in the valley his kingdom was in he decided he was immortal and more important War fueled peace(How he came to that conclusion after receiving third degree burns is unclear). He went to Canterlot with a army and declared'If you don't go to peace with my kingdom then we will go to war until we are at peace' which was met by 'By celestia he's a idiot!'
But he had a army with him so canterlot signed the peace treaty which specified that Equestria got everything and his kingdom got 0.876% of something(A dangerious idea Moonlight considered was they get 0.877% of something but was ruled out as a deadly move).He continues ruling his weird kingdom to this day..which was yesterday.
Personality:A deranged idiot who has very little common sense and a lack of grounding in reality nor any respect to common things, he rules his kingdom effianly considering they get nothing done( A tough goal to do as working towards nothing meant doing something). He has very little knowledge on proper Diplomacy and prefers throwing cake at the papers and likes to rip out pages he disagrees with. Generally good and evil he does bad things to satisfy his end but does good for others and demands something pointless in return.He understands the value of money by his kingdom having the best economy(which is no economy) and his citizens revile in liberty( unless they do something with liberty then he kicks them) as such he's clearing a grand king and a ladies man (He got turned down by every tree in Equestria 3 times a amazing tale of such games of the heart) and is clearly the best hat thing around!-From the desk of 'I made a paper box thing' co. Founded by Moonlight the average great hat wearer...person royal.
Current Home:Undead Kingdom located deep in the Ever free in a heavily fogged valley with lava rivers. The kingdom lies at the deepest area below the fog line.
Misc:The hat is actually evil and wants world domination but is on a idiots head who has no concept of listening. His kingdoms motto is 'We have a motto!', He never eats or sleeps due to the hats magic but does enjoy a piece of dead wood for tea time and a glass of filthy liquid he found at the bottom of a cave that's gross(Later said to also have 30% disgusting and 20% crazy nasty in it according to scientific study). He likes finishing novels(Eating them not writing them),He has no idea why he needs mistresses but they keep the castle tidy.

Dieteticchutoy3 wrote:

Name: Moonlight Hunter.
Occupation:Ruler of the Undead Kingdom.

What "undead kingdom"?

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Gear:Black top hat housing a evil spirit that gives him the power to raise and control the dead.

...you're doing a Baron Samedi?

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History:His growing up is unknown nor if he has family but he did stumble upon a mass grave for a ancient war over a magicial hat that could grant the user great power...
...He continues ruling his weird kingdom to this day..which was yesterday.

Words fail. I don't know what to do with any of this... it's just so absurd.


I don't know what to do with this. I can't approve it but it's such a mess that I'm not sure how to fix it.

OK, here's my new character. Again, please check for any over-the-top unusualness.

Name: Mythic Legend

Race: Alicorn adolescent

Age: 318 (looks about 15)

Mane: Short brown mane, curved inwards

Coat: Short-clipped white coat

Cutie Mark: A golden star with angelic white wings

Distinguishing Features: Her wing feathers are very long, and they're also huge for an adolescent alicorn. Her being an alicorn alone stands out enough, though.

Specialty (eg. special spells, unique powers etc): Asterokinesis (cosmic energy manipulation), flight, flyrokinesis (force field manipulation), invisibility, vitakinesis (health manipulation).

Weaknesses: With the exception of flight, her powers are quite limited, especially vitakinesis. As an adolescent alicorn, she must learn to use her powers on larger scales for longer periods--and in certain cases, without dealing damage to herself.

Occupation: Messenger/courier (yes, not all alicorns are princesses in my headcanon)

Gear: None

History: Her parents had been persecuted for mysterious reasons, so they had left their two daughters at an orphanage in the Griffon Kingdom. Unlike her older sister, Mythic was born an alicorn, so she outlived her pegasus sister by many years. When Mythic reached adolescence, her aging slowed down drastically. This lead to her receiving negative feedback from some griffon residents. Therefore, she decided to take leave. For the next few centuries, she would roam from one community to the other, working as a messenger or courier for anypony that required her services. Just this year, she decided to settle in one place, and flew for the closest town: Ponyville.

Personality: She is calm and collected in most situations, and she is also bibliophilic. From time to time, she would seek out peaceful places to meditate, or she would stay at home, where she would be visited by fillies and colts when she does not have any work to do. She is good with children.

Current Home: Recently moved into Ponyville

Misc: She is very stealthy and good at skydiving, though she hasn't risked flying fast enough to create a Sonic Rainboom of any sort.

KoreanLuna wrote:

Name: Mythic Legend

Race: Alicorn adolescent

I feel really bad about doing this to you but alicorn characters have an extremely high bar to leap by default because alicorn is the same race as a pair of god-like ponies who move the sun and moon around. Before I even read the rest of this sheet, I'm already afraid I'll need to say no to it.

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Distinguishing Features: Her wing feathers are very long, and they're also huge for an adolescent alicorn. Her being an alicorn alone stands out enough, though.

Well, how should an abdolescent alicorn's wings be? We only see adults in the show.

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Specialty (eg. special spells, unique powers etc): Asterokinesis (cosmic energy manipulation), flight, flyrokinesis (force field manipulation), invisibility, vitakinesis (health manipulation).

What does "cosmic energy manipulation" and "health manipulation" entail?

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History: Her parents had been persecuted for mysterious reasons, so they had left their two daughters at an orphanage in the Griffon Kingdom. Unlike her older sister, Mythic was born an alicorn, so she outlived her pegasus sister by many years. When Mythic reached adolescence, her aging slowed down drastically. This lead to her receiving negative feedback from some griffon residents. Therefore, she decided to take leave. For the next few centuries, she would roam from one community to the other, working as a messenger or courier for anypony that required her services. Just this year, she decided to settle in one place, and flew for the closest town: Ponyville.

So your headcanon is that alicorns are randomly birthed rather than made. I like this idea--except that it's explicitly at odds with show canon. Granted we don't know how Luna and Celestia became alicorns, but we know that Cadence and Twilight ascended to be, so it's a reasonable extension that alicorns cannot be born.


Especially after you abandoning the first character at not getting approved, I really wanted to say yes to this one. But as I said, alicorns have a nearly impossibly high bar to leap and as much as you've clearly restrained Mythic's power and seem to intend for her to be reasonably-scaled... she's an alicorn. Immortal, and potentially with enough power to move orbiting bodies the size of a planet (or thousands of times the size of one, if Equestria is a terra-centric world) around. That, and as much as I love and embrace headcanons, explicit deviation from them only works in threads where the GM is using your headcanon. If I say yes to this, it'll be a special use character only.

Now, assuming that's fine with you, answer the two questions I posed and ignore the problem I raised about her history.

By adolescent alicorn wings, I mean wings that are about Twilight Sparkle's size. Mythic's almost got Luna's wings, though, in terms of size.

I know I wrote "cosmic energy manipulation", but I believe I was being far too broad about it; I just couldn't find any other ways to explain this. What I meant was that she knows how to shoot little balls of stardust (burning ones, actually). Think Starfire from "Teen Titans", only at a much weaker scale (and they're white instead of green). But that's only when she's angry.

"Health manipulation" is also a broad term for what I had meant to say: healing. She can heal herself or another pony with her magic. Here's the overall catch of all her specialties, though. She is a born natural for these skills, but her stamina just can't catch up to them all. Flight is something she can do any time, but once she uses a spell, she needs to be careful not to use up her magic reserves. So even if she was inspired off of Twilight, she is definitely not that powerful.

I thought that I had implied it enough in the "History" a bit, but I guess it was unclear. Mythic's parents were being persecuted because they did something to end up with an alicorn daughter--it wasn't an accident or a part of natural birth. (I guess I should have made that clearer, huh?) But no one's ever told Mythic exactly how. The only other pony around for her, her sister, had refused to answer to anything related to that.

I didn't abandon Bellatrix, I simply have other uses for her elsewhere. I had developed at least 10 OCs after our conversation regarding Bellatrix, so if Mythic can only be used for special purposes that is totally fine. Just help me with choosing a single primary OC (I'll upload another one if you agree to this) for this RP domain.

If you allow Mythic to be around, it's OK if she's mentioned at any time as a good friend of my OC, right? Just so as long as she doesn't join in on an adventure (not that it's her thing).

By the way, happy birthday, DualThrone!

KoreanLuna wrote:

By adolescent alicorn wings, I mean wings that are about Twilight Sparkle's size. Mythic's almost got Luna's wings, though, in terms of size.

I have no idea how large their wings are in relation to one another but whatever, doesn't matter.

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I know I wrote "cosmic energy manipulation", but I believe I was being far too broad about it; I just couldn't find any other ways to explain this. What I meant was that she knows how to shoot little balls of stardust (burning ones, actually). Think Starfire from "Teen Titans", only at a much weaker scale (and they're white instead of green). But that's only when she's angry.

OK, Hulks out when she's angry and starts shooting miniature fireballs. I can get behind that.

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"Health manipulation" is also a broad term for what I had meant to say: healing.

So why'd you use an overly complicated phrase to convey such a simple idea?

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I thought that I had implied it enough in the "History" a bit, but I guess it was unclear. Mythic's parents were being persecuted because they did something to end up with an alicorn daughter--it wasn't an accident or a part of natural birth. (I guess I should have made that clearer, huh?) But no one's ever told Mythic exactly how. The only other pony around for her, her sister, had refused to answer to anything related to that.

You said they were persecuted, not why. Also, even if your character doesn't know something about herself, you do and must provide that information in history or wherever. You can specify that she doesn't know how she was born an alicorn but to approve the character, *I* must know and it must be written down for the examination of anyone who happens to read the character sheets.

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Just help me with choosing a single primary OC (I'll upload another one if you agree to this) for this RP domain.

On that subject, I have no help to offer or give. You must play the OC you want to play and has been approved for play.

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If you allow Mythic to be around, it's OK if she's mentioned at any time as a good friend of my OC, right? Just so as long as she doesn't join in on an adventure (not that it's her thing).

I don't mind although I'd prefer that you put in the work to make her a usable character here.

Name: Dissonancy
Race: Earth pony
Age: 16
Mane: Light blue
Coat: White
Cutie mark.:
Extra details that aren't needed but are nice to add: has a single fang
Distinguishing Features:
Specialty (eg. special spells, unique powers etc): can flout like father (discord), can use chaos magic, and can conjure things out of thin air.
Weaknesses: Being cut out of something or being ignored.
Occupation: none as of now
Gear: doesn't normally carry things as she can just conjure them as she needs them
History: Lived in canterlot her entire life, her mother being Celestia and her father being Discord her life is pretty much never the same everyday.
Personality: Rebellious, pulls pranks on everypony doesn't care if someone else gets caught in the backlash of her pranks but will laugh at them anyways.
Current Home: Canterlot castle
Misc: Has best friend named Zilo witch is a hybrid of dragon, changeling, and pony.

To start this off, I hope you realize that making an OC that's the child of two canon characters puts you at an extreme disadvantage and requires a character that is extraordinarily well-written and well-made to even get passed the door.

Dissonancy wrote:

Name: Dissonancy
Specialty (eg. special spells, unique powers etc): can flout like father (discord), can use chaos magic, and can conjure things out of thin air.

In canon, Discord is akin to a god, able to reinvent all of reality with a wish. Laws like gravity don't apply to him, so he can float in midair. Conservation of energy and matter don't apply to him to he can make anything out of nothing. And none of what he does is actually magic; his abilities are simply reality bending to obey his whims. This is one of the big, BIG reason that OC children of canon characters have a steep cliff to climb: all the ones that people use as the parents of their OC are incredibly unusual in intellect, ability, or power. Here, you combined the goddess of the sun with a god-like manifestation of chaos, and gave the character the powers of the second parent. Simply put, this cannot be accepted.

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Weaknesses: Being cut out of something or being ignored.

Being vulnerable to having her feelings hurt does not quality as a weakness.

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History: Lived in canterlot her entire life, her mother being Celestia and her father being Discord her life is pretty much never the same everyday.

On top of the problems in your specialty section, you gave me a single line of history. I can accept relatively short histories but this is so vapid and without substance that it's impossible to allow. Moreoever, it comes across as you having no desire to make an effort to make a character instead of a crude outline of one.

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Misc: Has best friend named Zilo witch is a hybrid of dragon, changeling, and pony.

Which. And how the hay...? Oh, nevermind, too minor.


OK, basically, you need to give me a character. This character has no features, no history, no depth, no creativity, and nothing I can approve. On top of that, she has to surmount the problem of being canon-shattering and she doesn't even get close to doing so. This character needs detailed total revision before I can even THINK of passing it.

Name: Morning Frost Attrition
Race: Pegasus
Age: 25
Mane: Icy blue with a red streak .
Coat: Beige.
Cutie mark.: Snowflake half obscured by a dark cloud.
Extra details that aren't needed but are nice to add:
Distinguishing Features:  None, save the four hammer-hooves she constantly wears.
Specialty (eg. special spells, unique powers etc): Attrition’s special talent from when she was still Morning Frost was to create magical enhanced snow storms of varying intensity that could last as long as days under the brightest sunlight and hot weather. Upon joining the mercenary company at age 12, Attrition was trained daily in combat arts, survival, and other good mercenary skills.  She is very good at weather manipulation and close quarters combat. She can use her greater than normal skill with Pegasus magic to partially disrupt telekinesis, usually allowing her to escape the rest of the way with her wings.
Weaknesses: Decapitation, severe internal bleeding, removal of heart, etc.
Occupation: Client Seeker and Inner Circle Member of the Warbleroc Mercenary Company.
Gear: Saddlebags, and a set of four hammer-hooves that can be charaged with electricity on command.
History: Morning Frost was born in a small village outside the borders of Trottingham. Her parents, Morning Dew and Gleaming Star, were kind as was the rest of her village. Growing up, she made a number of friends including a young colt by the name of Marble Column. Both of them were six at the time, and lacking cutie marks. Six years later, on the last day Hearth’s Warming snow, Morning Frost decided to explore the various snow clouds before they faded completely. Unknown to her, she had infused her Pegasus magic into the clouds and the snow they carried, causing them to last for the next six weeks. No one realized what had happened until her friend, Marble, pointed her cutie mark.
Four years later, disaster struck. A band of roving deserters from the Royal Guard pillaged the village. They had been exposed to a corrupted artifact while on a mission, and it drove them commit horrific acts during the plundering. While their parents distracted the bandits, Marble and Frost were able to escape into the woods. They were to wait for the bandits to leave, then warn the city. However, a week into their wait, the pair contracted a terrible illness. Fortunately, a mercenary company, the Warblerocs, were moving through the area on their way to meet with a client. They rescued the pair, and were able to save Morning Frost. After assisting the filly in burying her friend, they offered to let her travel with them. Seeing no other choice, she accepted.
Having resigned herself to her new life, Morning Frost sought to learn all that she could of her new lot in life. The horrors she witnessed had left her desensitized to the grisly future of a mercenary, and it was better than dying alone in the forest. She began learning from various mercs when they had spare time, picking up basics such as reading and writing, but also extensive combat training. She began rising through the ranks, soon participating in battles more and more. After a particularly blood siege in which she was forced to freeze the targets to death in their fortress, she discarded the name “Morning Frost” and took up “Attrition”, as a reminder of the Warblerocs that had been lost before she was able to blockade the enemy. As Attrition, she soon became the one of the inner circle of the Warblerocs, and was assigned the job of seeking out new clients.
Personality: Stoic, but can instantly switch to that of an excited filly around rare and valuable artifacts.
Current Home: Trottingham.
Misc:

Lorthalis of Crows wrote:

Name: Morning Frost Attrition

Why ya gotta make me hurt inside?

Approved.

Name: Charcoal Embers

Race: Pegasus

Age: 20

Mane: Red mane with orange stripes, usually not really messed with except for when she brushes her mane once in the morning. After working it usually gets a bit messy, but nothing usually bad

Coat: Her coat is full black, usually having a slight sheen from sweat, but also almost always having bits of fur here and there sticking up, from not having much effort being put into her coat

Cutie mark.:Her Cutie mark is of rolled up blueprint. It is supposed to symbolize her expertise in building.

Extra details that aren't needed but are nice to add:
Distinguishing Features: Her darker coat colors are usually what are first noticeable, but also the fact that she always has her glasses on, and that she doesn't look ponies in the eye

Specialty (eg. special spells, unique powers etc): Charcoal is an excellent builder. She can use her own two hooves to put together many things. And while she specializes in carpentry, she also has some skill in plumbing and a very small bit of metalwork knowledge (smithing swords and other weapons)

Weaknesses: Charcoal is a very shy pony. She keeps herself locked up in her home most of the time unless she has a reason to go out. She has few friends and isn't a very social pony. She is especially uncomfortable around stallions. She is a flightless Pegasus as well, having never been able to fly since birth. Her vision is also impaired, and while she can see without her glasses, it's much more difficult.

Occupation: Charcoal is a carpenter. She works from home usually in her workshop, filling whatever order was given to her. If she isn't then she is tending to her shop, selling various things she has built. On the side she has a small little shop where ponies can buy various furniture. When she isn't doing that she is typically helping out in different construction sites in Ponyville.

Gear: She doesn't have any gear, unless you count the various tools that she unnecessarily keeps in her bag

History:When Charcoal was a little filly back in Cloudsdale, she was always made fun of. She was born with a condition in her wings that prevented her from ever flying. No matter what her parents did or what doctors she was brought to they always said that she will never have any hope of flying. Having given up hope Charcoal's parent's nearly threw her out in disgust, but decided against it. They waited to see if any new advanced in magic would be able to give their daughter the ability of flight again.

Many years after, and Charcoal is grown up a bit and was going to school. It was no secret to any of the ponies at school that Charcoal had a major disorder. Thus, she was the joke of the school. She never had any friends and everypony at school made fun of her every day. And every day coming home she would always get yelled at by her parents and soon afterword get beaten by them. Then one day she decided enough was enough. On the night of her birthday she snuck out of her parents house and stole a hot air balloon she found and flew it to the only other town she had ever seen, Ponyville.

Though, on the way to Ponyville Charcoal started hearing some sort of crackling sound from the balloon. She simply ignored it for a while, and when she was nearly to Ponyville the basket broke and she fell through. When she hit the ground she passed out, but not before seeing one pony come over to her and asking if she was okay.

When she woke up she was in the hospital and was told by one of the doctors that she was going to be perfectly fine. She had gone into a coma, but hadn't received and brain injury and was going to get a full recovery. About 3 weeks later she was released from the hospital and was shown around by a filly who would soon become her first friend, Caprisha. Charcoal soon had to leave her when it was getting late and she had to go home. Charcoal went off on her own and without some place to stay, slept in a box that she had put together from some plywood she had found. But then she had an idea that was better.

After about 2 weeks of planning and gathering of supplies that had been thrown out she had enough material to build her out house. It took her many days, but she used every last bit to build a rudimentary from the scraps she had collected. When she finished she had a small, but livable house. It was kind of like a small storage room. But when she had finished, she had also gotten her cutie mark as well. She had never smiled more than she did that day.

For another year Charcoal spend her time in Ponyville. She met a few ponies, didn't make friends, but she still met a few really nice ponies while she was there. Then one day while she was walking back to her home that she had improved as much as she could from when she first built it she was stopped by some pegasus guards. They were sent by her parents to get her back and bring her home. Without even giving her a chance to say goodbye Charcoal found herself being hauled back to Cloundsdale and back home where she received the most vicious beating she had ever gotten.

Then when she was finally old enough to move out Charcoal snuck out yet again and moved back to Ponyville and back to her old home where she continues to live there to this day.

Personality: Charcoal is very shy. She isn't hard to get along with, but she can be unnecessarily stubborn at times, especially when it comes to how much work she can do. She is a sweet mare though, underneath her shy demeanor she can be very nice and loving.

Current Home: Ponyville

Misc: Charcoal is a flightless Pegasus, she was born with a disease that degenerates her wing muscles, preventing them from growing properly and not forming enough muscle to help her achieve lift. She is much larger than the average Pegasus mare though, having a build that could almost compare to a earth pony mare.

Charcoal Embers wrote:

Character approved. Nothing wrong with her in any way to comment about against... But the sads, man. The sads... I hope to see her having a good time in threads for a change.

Name:Silas Mancer.
Race:Earth Pony.
Age:46.
Mane:Soft white.
Coat:Light Gray.
Cutie Mark:A blue beaker and wrench.
Specality:Extremly Intelligent.
Weakness:Weak In hand-to-hand combat, Emotional, A bit far sighted.
Gear:Mancer Industries Force Shield- a device he wears at all times which generates a force field around him.
Occupation:Owner, Founder and CEO of Mancer Industries.
History:Born and raised in Trottingham he lived a average life exceling at school and showed great potential in Industry. He went to Manehattan joining Tech Co. and rose through its ranks. He caught the attention of the Famous Krillton Family who owned 67% of Manehattan and other towns and were in truth a Mafia running a criminal empire. Rewarding him they built Mancer Industries rewarding him and became a extension of Tech Co., Silas originally pleased grew weary merely producing what Tech Co. Inventted and wanted to do his own production line. He argued with Jennifer Krillton who ran Tech Co. and when his demands were not met he seperated the two unofficially. The Krilltons angered warned he made a dangerious foe but did not take hostile action due to a scandel involing their corrupt mayor. Silas made a fortune in 7 years being a indepent company and dedcided to rid of the Krillton's but he needed two things: Allies and Assassin's.
Personality:A quiet man, he is patient and logical but posses a dark side choosing a illegal path to get to his dreams. He is anti-social and never leaves his home. He posses a deep regret and guilt for the evil he will soon commit.
Current Home:Mancer Industries Headquarters located in Trottingham.
Misc:No one has seen him in person ever. His new project is Top-Secret, not even the royals are allowed to know. His latest prototypes shown to the public verg on being a mixture of sci-fi, steam and cyber punk.

Dieteticchutoy3 wrote:

Name:Silas Mancer

He's a man, you invented his company, you invented a mafia, you invented a family, and your products are cyber-punk. Not a single element of this character passes muster.

Name: Sir Hawkens II (his real name is Hawkeye)

Race: Unicorn

Age: 37

Mane: Light brown, cut short.

Coat: A light shade of tan.

Cutie mark.: A telescope crossed by a musket.

Extra details that aren't needed but are nice to add: He likes coffee.

Distinguishing Features: His lightly Bitish accent. Never cusses if he can help it.

Specialty (eg. special spells, unique powers etc): The stallion has very good aim with nearly anything that requires it, be it his musket, a bow, crossbow, or thrown items, capable of a shot that even the most experienced users of such items would be astonished. He is also rather charming at times.

Weaknesses: Though rather endurant, Hawkens is not very strong, any average unicorn or pegasi most likely stronger than he is. On top of such, Hawkens was never the most magically capable, his levitation being the strongest of his magic, but other spells he tries turn out rather weak in comparison to average.

Occupation: Hunter, Scholar, Gentlecolt.

Gear: Hawkens always wears his favorite leather vest, which is enchanted to be warmer when it's cold out and colder when it's getting rather warm out, while also protecting his chest from anything that's duller than a dagger. He also has his Musket, using only the strongest steel and best wood he could get his hooves on, it was crafted after five years of tedious work, the materials enchanted to be stronger than steel. It's 'sparkstone', as Hawkens calls it, is a diamond enchanted to naturally generate concussive energies over time, which serves as the musket's firing mechanism, the trigger to be pulled by his own magic, the force sending a lead projectile out at speeds which depend on the time the sparkstone had to charge. Though after a minute and a half the concussive force stops charging and is strong enough to send a Manticore staggering back, but will destroy the lead projectile in the process, rendering it's use and deadliness at range after that time null.

History: Hawkens was born in Great Bitain, raised by his parents until the age of seven, when he was sent to his grandfather's home in Canterlot, where his mother's father began to raise and teach the lad. Hawkens eventually started to get more and more interested in his grandfather's stories of hunting, and at age fourteen, Hawkens was being taught to hunt with bows and crossbows, and even a small amount of knowledge in traps. After about ten years, Hawkens had a few manticores under his belt and was more confident with his hunting skills. But soon Hawkens' grandfather gave him a set of blueprints, and told him that, if he wanted, he could try to make the item on those pages. Hawkens took one look at the pages, and immediately set his time and money to work, the item taking five years, but being oh so very worth it in the long run, as it has served him well. A mere week after he finished the musket, however, his grandfather grew increasingly ill, and Hawkens stayed by his bedside for two weeks, until the old stallion finally passed, and after finding the grandfather's will, Hawkens realized he was left everything the old stallion had. Home, money, everything. After that, Hawkens set out to continue with his love for hunting, never getting tired of the thrill of tracking and taking down rare, exotic, or even massive beasts.

Personality: Hawkens is very much a gentleman, preferring to be very kind, helpful, and friendly with anyone who will reciprocate this and even those who don't get Hawkens' kindness.

Current Home: He owns a rather nice home in Canterlot, but is rarely there, usually out on a hunt or just exploring.

Misc: He named his rifle 'Buster' to remember his grandfather by, as that was Hawken's childhood nickname.

BronzeFog wrote:

Name: Sir Hawkens II (his real name is Hawkeye)

Approved.

OK, before I go ahead with this character sheet, I'm going to mention to Dual that I am NOT canceling Mythic Legend. I am simply scrapping her for the time being to give her a. . . "retcon", you might say. Just gonna alter some stuff before submitting her again.

Anyway, here's another OC, without further ado:

Name: Darkcharm

Race: "Corrupted" unicorn

Age: 13

Mane: Moderate violet mane, long and straight almost down to hooves; straight-edged bangs.

Coat: Medium gray

Cutie Mark: A black heart-shaped gemstone

Distinguishing Features: Her pupils are slitted; that alone is a dead giveaway. There are also three garments that she always wears when going out: a long red ribbon tied up on a lock of hair, a necklace with a black heart at the center, and a small black cloak.

Specialty: Dark magic, arcane/runic magic, clairsentience, creature creation

Weaknesses: Her powers are somewhat out of control; she is not spiritually strong enough. She's also a tortured soul, and she finds it hard to help those who have rejected her before.

Occupation: Trader (she travels to various places to sell goods at market or fairs every now and then)

Gear: Andatime, her necklace (it's actually an amulet) and Cibeo, her cloak (which she always uses for multiple purposes)

History: Darkcharm never knew her parents growing up; they had both died of disease shortly after she was born. She was raised by her uncle (Dr. Caballeron), who was an archaeologist and would take her along on expeditions. Once, Caballeron had taken her on an expedition with him to examine the ruins of an ancient civilization dubbed "the Akreixith". She had ventured to the remains of an Akreixith temple while her uncle wasn't looking; this is where she found Andatime and Cibeo. Hearing voices call to her, she was compelled to don them, inadvertently Binding herself with the spirits inhabiting the two handicrafts and gaining powers (the specialties listed above). Upon returning to her uncle, Caballeron would find his niece seemingly corrupted; she would later learn her eyes had been slitted. Caballeron fled the site, leaving Darkcharm behind. Fortunately, Andatime and Cibeo had begun to regard her as their mistress upon the Binding, and helped her survive in the Everfree Forest, where the ruins were. It has been her home since. But Darkcharm still feels resent towards her uncle, and she waits for the day when she would be able to exact revenge on him.

Personality: She's very complicated; one might see her as neutrally good. She's been afraid of lots of things in this world since Caballeron had left her behind. Despite her calm exterior, she can be angered quite easily, if the right triggers are pulled. A raging Darkcharm is not one to mess with.

Current Home: Everfree Forest

Misc.: When she is not wearing Andatime and Cibeo in their object forms, the two can instead be seen as ponies. Andatime is a brown pegasus filly, Cibeo is a green unicorn colt. Both have black manes. Darkcharm has also had a few run-ins with Zecora and Daring Do, sometimes traveling around with the latter for the sake of old times.

KoreanLuna wrote:

OK, before I go ahead with this character sheet, I'm going to mention to Dual that I am NOT canceling Mythic Legend. I am simply scrapping her for the time being to give her a. . . "retcon", you might say. Just gonna alter some stuff before submitting her again.

Good girl.

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Name:Darkcharm

Approved.

Name: Evoltit, Latin for Headless

Race: Unicorn Dullahan

Age: 327, though her appearance is near the age of 17.

Mane: Snow white, long.

Coat: Pale, bone white.

Cutie mark.: A skull, with a dagger stabbed into the left temple, the tip of the blade exiting the right temple.

Distinguishing Features: Her scars, one going from above her left eye down to her lower left jaw and quite jagged, while the other was a clean cut running a circle around Eve's neck. Her very tall stature.

Specialty: Eve excels at magic based around limited another's magical fighting capabilities. Her main way of doing so is using hand-contact to drain any form of mana she can touch, be it a spell or contact to the pony themselves, however touching the pony drains them very fast in comparison to draining any spell they would throw at her. Eve is also extremely knowledgeable in darker magicks due to her heritage, and, with her new body, she is also very strong and endurant.

Weaknesses: Her paranoia, especially since she is technically an undead, and therefor unwanted by most. Eve's magic is also rather limited outside of what she's more capable at, taking a little more work to do most other spells than average. Stronger spells that Eve tries to drain will cause a fair bit of strain and will more likely negate the spell at the cost of some mana. Eve cannot hold onto the mana she drains for too long or the magical backlash will be quite severe. Silver weapons are the only way to kill Eve but anything can hurt her. Light-based magicks are also very damaging to her, twice that of which normal spells would harm her, and trying to absorb them would harm her very greatly.

Occupation: Mercenary.

Gear: Heavy, jet-black steel plate armor that covers every inch of her body, though she oddly lacks neck or head armor, but this armor is unique to her, as it formed out of the manifestation of Eve's sheer willpower when she became a Dullahan, and is quite harder than steel. A large, jagged obsidian dagger, enchanted to be hard as steel and extremely sharp.

History: Eve grew up under the teachings of her parents. The Von Black family, aptly named for their intense research and vast knowledge of dark magic and it's uses. Eve herself grew quickly accustomed to the negative drawbacks of dark magic, mostly the massive magical backlash from failure and it's dangerous way of attracting undead and demons. At age seventeen Eve and her family went on a vacation trip to the Everfree, and, normally, her parents would be able to handle most anything there, but something was wrong, Eve, her little sister, and their parents...couldn't use magic. Mere minutes later they were attacked and captured by Diamond Dog slavers. After weeks of being forced to work, Eve bit the Alpha, nearly killing him. The next day, Eve was set onto the chopping block, and before her eyes, and before her parents, her little sister was beheaded, then her father, then her mother, but Eve still refused to beg for her life, and when the Alpha raised his axe, she told him she'd be waiting in Tartarus. But after that fatal axe swung down, Eve found herself in a black abyss, unable to see anything but her own body. She glared around, waiting, waiting. After what seemed like hours she felt something move behind her, and she saw a massive set of plate armor, with no helmet or pony within, and a golden-feathered bird similar to a phoenix perched on it's shoulder. "Choose." The word echoed around her, and suddenly she felt two things. The bird meant Justice. With that she would bring justice for her family. And the Armor...Revenge...she could get her revenge, kill them all with her bare hands...She chose, and would forever be haunted by that cold, deep laughter that echoed around her after she did. She woke up next to a river, encased in the massive plate armor she wears today with her head beside her body, and was confused how this worked, but then came the voices. Shrieking into her mind to destroy, to kill, to ravage the land of all life. She fought them down, and they obeyed, vanishing until her mind faltered next. She reattached her head and headed towards the Slaver's cave. What happened next, she would never remember clearly, but she woke up with blood encrusted along her entire suit's arms and legs, spattering on her face and chest, and her father's dagger in her hands, the obsidian knife covered in blood like the rest of her. She swore to herself never to lose control. Ever again. Three hundred years passed, and she had slowly got into the groove of working as a Mercenary, loving the more hands-on jobs that involved fighting almost anything.

Personality: Kind, but can be mean at times. She is gentle, but her tall, towering plated form can scare others. She can be very harsh and cruel when aggravated.

Current Home: N/A

Misc: Is rather experimental.

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