OC Character Thread 2 (This thread is now locked, please use the OC Character Thread 3 above)

The_Pariah wrote:

Nova Storm

Approved.

Name: Carus Rasa

Race: Vampire Pegasus of the Vampirus Renovo genus.

Age: 2074

Mane: A very pale and dull light pink.

Coat: pale, snowy white.

Cutie mark.: A heart-shaped pillow.

Extra details that aren't needed but are nice to add: She loves to feel needed.

Distinguishing Features: The odd eyes she has. Both iris and pupil are the same color so they blend together, but the color is an extremely pale and dull pink, and her eyes, no matter her expression, look very lifeless.

Specialty (eg. special spells, unique powers etc): Rasa's bodily regeneration is faster than any other of her Vampiric Genus, capable of limb regeneration after only ten seconds. Other than that, however, Rasa is really only good at being cute and cuddly.

Weaknesses: Rasa, though with massively powerful regeneration, is easily the most killable of her genus still alive. It only takes two steps, the removal and staking of her heart, to kill her permanently. The mare is also very fragile, and has brittle bones disease, even though she regenerates fast enough to counter it.

Occupation: N/A

Gear: A black collar with a silver tag in the shape of her cutiemark.

History: Carus doesn't remember much of her past. And never will. She grew up rather normally, but then she was kidnapped, taken by slavers and sold between hundreds of groups through four decades, constantly abused, always insulted, beaten down. But after they were done, the shattered  mare was thrown to the wilderness and nearly killed dozens of times before she stumbled across a town. After that, the broken mare wandered constantly, eventually finding 'Masters' to take care of her for a little while at least, though she never understood why they never helped her for longer than a month or two. Years and years pass, and nothing has changed. The mare is still broken, still emotionless and blank. And hasn't smiled, truly smiled, since before she was taken by those slavers more than two thousand years back.

Personality: Silent, kind enough, but mostly emotionless as a rock and not the sharpest tool in the shed.

Current Home: N/A

Misc: Likes to cuddle.

BronzeFog wrote:

Name: Carus Rasa
Race: Vampire Pegasus of the Vampirus Renovo genus.

Vampirus Renovo?


Also, what is it with people and assigning a terrible, heart-breaking past to OCs? This thing makes me immensely sad and I almost wish I could make you be kinder to your character as a condition of approval. But I can't; character approved.

Name: Cherry Morning

Race: Pegasus

Age: 26

Mane: Magenta streaked with pink. He keeps it long and ties it back when in public, but he lets it down in private.

Coat: Light pink, almost white

Cutie mark: A quill dipped in ink, beginning to write on paper.

Extra details that aren't needed but are nice to add: His eyes are a magenta color. His wings are impeccably groomed, mainly because messy wings are terribly uncomfortable

Distinguishing Features: The first thing most ponies notice is his insistence on wearing clothing in public, normally wearing a dress shirt and a waistcoat.

Specialty (eg. special spells, unique powers etc): He's a very good writer for such a young age, very good at operating a camera, and very good at getting information.

Weaknesses: He's horribly average in areas other than writing, photography, and information gathering. He's a technical pacifist, and will use Heaven's Door to make any weapon he has to wield non-lethal. He also suffers from myopia (nearsightedness) which he has to wear correctional lenses for. He's only a so-so flyer.

Occupation: Author, editor and part time investigative journalist

Gear: a quill made from one of his own feathers, his prescription glasses, a thermos full of coffee, a camera, extra film, a notepad and a mechanical pencil. He keeps his typewriter at home along with his multitude of journals and rough drafts.

He recently came in possession of a strange quill marked with strange glowing writing. It's called Heaven's Door, and allows the wielder to alter the basic property of something by writing a word on something. It cannot make something indestructible, cannot work on the wielder, and has little to no effect on ponies except for one use: If the wielder writes 'Open' on the head of a pony, it causes their mind to manifest as a book with their entire life and thoughts written in it. In this state, the wielder could place a 'lock' on the pony EX: 'Cannot attack [insert name here]'. Only one lock can be placed on a pony, so the wielder has to choose wisely. Note: You cannot kill a pony using the 'Open Mind' function nor can you render them completely helpless.

Examples of uses: Writing 'unlock' on a locked door unlocks the door, likewise writing 'lock' on an unlocked door locks it. Writing 'non-lethal' on a weapon renders it unable to cause lethal or permanent damage.

History: Cherry Morning was born to a pair of pegasus cherry farmers as the youngest child of the family, having a sister seven years older than him (Cherry Evening) and a brother only four years older than him (Cherry Noon). Sadly, unlike his brother and sister, he didn't find his cutie mark on the cherry farm, being subpar at picking cherries from the trees. Instead, he found his cutie mark at school, during a writing assignment. He was only about 10. His 'cutie mark' was telling him he needed to write, and write often, so he did. Then the side effects of his cutie mark hit him, and he needed to constantly have something around him to write on all the time. He graduated from the school system at 16, then his parents sent him to a finishing school for writing. He passed all of his classes with flying colors, graduating at 22. He then got a job with a newspaper, working minimum wage while writing drafts of his first novel. He ended up out of his first apartment since the landlord died. He shifted from apartment to apartment, not being able to live up to the standards of each one. He eventually ended up getting an offer from a strange noblemare to live with her in her mansion in Canterlot. He took her offer and continued writing for the newspaper. The noblemare soon began to make advances on Cherry, asking innocent personal questions about him and his line of work. She moved up from there, giving him gifts and making romantic advances, eventually taking Cherry to dinner and a play. Soon they became lovers, inspiring Cherry to work more with his draft. He wrote about a doctor who had fallen on hard times and had lost almost everything, who was taken in by a mysterious and eccentric noblemare. Cherry and the noblemare continued their relationship, growing closer and closer. Two years after the start of the relationship, the noblemare revealed herself to be a vampire, and she thought it would be a relationship breaker, but Cherry only got more curious. He began to ask her questions on vampirism, and took notes when she answered. He soon compiled all of his notes, making it into an informational format for a book. He found an editor, sending it in and getting a finalized version. His new editor helped him find a publisher, soon publishing the book under 'A Firsthand Experience on Vampires and Useful Notes therein'. It had average sales and reception in the first year, but was considered a decent informational piece. The noblemare also inspired the twist in Cherry's first book, which he had titled 'My Personal Plague'. With his new revenue from his informational, he managed to find a good and affordable apartment in Ponyville, but promised to stay in contact with the noblemare. He spent the last half of the year finishing up 'My Personal Plague', finally finishing it and sending it in for edits. When the finalized version came back, he read through it, satisfied with his work, then sent it to be published. It became a big hit, reaching top 10 best sellers of the year. He still kept working for the newspaper, but began writing another draft, he's still searching for another big hit of inspiration for his next novel. He recently received a gift in the mail, a strange quill called Heaven's Door that could alter the properties of anything he wrote on, but the package was unmarked.

Personality: An eccentric and charismatic stallion, he's a bit of a flirt, especially during interviews for newspapers and magazines. He tends to be lazy about most things that aren't writing, though he's very concerned with personal hygiene. He's very laid back and tends not to lose his cool.

Current Home: Though he moves about, tending to live in Canterlot, he recently moved to a more permanent residence in Ponyville due to the lower prices for apartments there.

Misc: He goes through coffee and caffeinated beverages like you wouldn't believe.

Wiserodin032402 wrote:

Name: Cherry Morning

Approved.

Name: Nijara Dreamer

Race: Thestral/Demon

Age: 27

Mane: Long, snow white with two streaks of pink and dark blue running down the left side

Coat: White with a pattern of black lines across her arms and face, somewhat similar to a zebra but applied inconsistently.

Cutie mark.: A dream catcher

Extra details that aren't needed but are nice to add: Her appearance registers as slightly off with ponies; when looking at her most ponies instinctively feel something strange about her but cannot place it. This is because of the demonic presence inside her, and most magical beings having an instinctive fear/dislike of demonic magic.

Distinguishing Features: Her almost all white appearance naturally (the streaks in her mane are dyed in) is striking especially in the deserts of Saddle Arabia where she usually resides.

Specialty (eg. special spells, unique powers etc): Biologically immortal thanks to her healing factor from the demonic presence within her, can read and manipulate the dreams of others, exceptionally strong for a pony but not quite to superhuman levels.

Weaknesses: Still vulnerable to death by disease, injury or other non-natural methods, cannot enter the dream realm outright, impulsive and very rarely thinking of consequences of her actions. At times her mind, the result of the union of her own mind and the demon, "malfunctions", causing long blank stretches in Nijara's memory and a loss of powers during this time.

Occupation: None

Gear: An amulet around her neck which allows her and the demon within her to temporarily split in order to fully converse with each other. Also usually dressed in wildly varying styles depending on her tastes that day.

History: A thestral living in Saddle Arabia as part of a research team, Nijara found herself in great danger when she tried to offer relief aid to a town struck by a sandstorm only to get assaulted by a team of raiders and slavers who had ransacked the town.

When she was taken to their camp to be ransomed Nijara was contacted in her dreams by a Hyang, a spirit of the dream realm that could enter the body of a pony and use them as a vessel. The Hyang spirits were typically demonised in legends as malicious entities that possessed ponies for their own needs but Nijara was scared and desperate enough to accept his offer.

When she awoke Nijara had the powers of the Hyang but also a blood lust and a love of carnage that were far from her own. After annihilating the bandits and freeing their captives she wandered out into the desert where she was found a few days later by Mechanitis Silver, the fourth Hoodwink. Mechanitis took Nijara in and helped her to gain control over the Hyang instincts, taking a fair amount of physical abuse from Nijara until she was able to get herself under control for the most part.

Nijara would after that choose to accompany Mechanitis as his companion whether he liked it or not, and nowadays she and he share a romantic bond as they travel the world together.

Personality: Nijara is an adrenaline junkie and thrill seeker, not unfamiliar with activities like leaping off of cliffs in free fall and swimming full pelt towards waterfalls. Her urges for carnage and battle occasionally cause her to be more aggressive than she would like but she does her best to keep these urges in check to at least controllable levels.

Current Home: Owns a house in Saddle Arabia but is almost always wandering elsewhere.

Misc: Theme song: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=zY9tvUBCJsQ . Has slitted blue eyes.

ObsidianPony wrote:

Name: Nijara Dreamer

Approved. More thestral is more better.

(Link to Zen's sheet since there's some connection to it)

Name: Maple
Race: Tyravani (former unicorn)
Age: 301, but appears to be mid 20's
Alignment: Neutralish?
Mane: Light vibrant blue with a wild array of silvers and purples creating an interesting floral pattern to it. Kept long and usually a little messy.
Coat: A lush jungly green
Cutie mark: A tree with half of it being dead and the other full of life.
Distinguishing Features: There's usually some kind of foliage growing out of her mane and/or tail. Her bright silvery eyes.
Specialty: Maple's primary ability is centered aroud healing. Using her magic she can mend cuts, replace lost blood, set and fix broken bones, even force life back into a corpse if she gets to them fast enough and a few other conditions are present. Those conditions being the abundance of nature or specifically plant life around her. For Maple only has so much magical power, and the greater the wounds, the more power it takes to fix them. Without anything nearby, Maple could fix minor broken bones and heal cuts and bruises. With an abundance of nature around, Maple can take the life energy from the plants and amplify her power considerably, though the revival is something that she's reluctant to do ever because of the damage it causes the area.
Secondly, Maple can use her powers to accelerate plant growth, but again she has a limited amount of power. She could accelerate a couple trees right up to it's adulthood point, but that's just a couple. Alternatively, Maple could cause several tree seeds to become well off saplings and eventually get them to full tree status, but that'd be taking days if not weeks. Lesser plants though she can make grow much more quickly and to a greater extent.
Lastly, Maple has a seed inside her that is effectively her core. The plant has replaced most of her vital organs and bones making her  good bit more difficult to kill and physically stronger. There are no bones to break, cutting her will weaken her, but it isn't usualy going to be fatal, so on and so forth. She can also grow plants out of herself at the same accelerated rate, even going so far as to be able to grow a tree out of her.
Weaknesses: Fire, sickness, poison, freezing, drought, and acid are much more effective against Maple, especially if it reaches her core seed. Removing her core seed won't actually kill her, though it will cause that body to wither and dissapate. Gradually though and so long as the seed is intact, a new body will grow around the seed. This process however takes about a month for her to return to her normal form and during that time, the seed is vulnerable to being destroyed which will kill her.
Occupation: Former forest guardian, former pirate, and now she's a traveler and wandering healer.
Gear: Maple usually has a brown cloak on, a set of saddle bags loaded up with seeds, soil, and some water containers. She's also got a rather large mallet strapped across her back.
History: Long before the Trottingham disaster, or even the rise of the mane six, there was a simple village on the far side of the everfree forest, well away from Ponyville.  A small quiet town, and the kind where nearly everypony knew each other. A young mare then, Maple, set out one day into the forests to search for some of the rarer herbs to assist in her medicinal studies. Taking her usual route, Maple arrived at a grove she'd visited before but this time several surprises were waiting for the young mare. While she began harvesting a couple of the rare plants as well as a couple she'd never seen before, Maple was oblivious to the pairs of yellow glowing eyes watching her from the bushes, at least until they emerged from the cover and let out a growl.
Shocked, Maple turned about to behold a small pack of timberwolves eyeing her hungrily. As the collection of beasts sprung at the young mare, she turned and fled wildly into the forest. Maple lost all track of time and distance in that chase, she had no time to think of how far she was running or where, it was simply a desire to get away from the relentless timberwolves. Everytime she would start to slow whether it be from sheer exhaustion or a thought that she'd managed to lose her purseurs, the pack would turn back up and make her pay with a fresh bite or cut for making the mistake.
Hours after the start of this terrifying ordeal, after numerous cuts, bites and scrapes all along her hide, her hoves cracked and broken from the recklessness of her flight, her mane tangled, torn and with bits of foliage practically woven with it, and after taking her freshly harvested herbs for their boost of energy despite the risky reprocussions of not having them properly prepared  or even knowing what some of them were, the last vestiges of Maple's stamina wore out. At the point where even fear for her life could no longer drive the mare to go on, she collapsed and awaited the fate that was audibly still approaching. Maple didn't have to wait long for the wooden fangs to find their mark in her flesh, a pain barely felt over the sheer exhaustion that currently wracked her body and mind.
In what she fully believed to be her final moments, Maple's thoughts turned bleak. Am I really going to die here? Is this what's to become to of me? I... I don't want to die. Please, anypony, anything, please help me, I don't want to die, she meekly pleaded, though she couldn't tell whether this was outloud or in her head. Though it only served to increase her surprise when she was answered. It wasn't audible, more like a feeling that just suddenly enveloled her but it still managed to convey an answer and a vision. Within this vision, Maple saw a dragon like creature made of vines, trees, and other greenery slithering through the air with it's long snakey body.
It agreed to save her, that she wouldn't die, but in return she'd be bound to the creature in service , it's whims and the whims of the forest this guardian was sanctioned over. With no other options available, Maple accepted and when she awoke an unknown amount of time later, the wolves were gone. She herself was different as well. Her mane, tail, and coat were no longer the colors they'd been and even her cutie mark had changed. There was also another voice inside her mind, the voice of the forest's guardian. It instructed her, taught her of her new powers and her new role in the world.
For centuries, Maple filled her new role without hesitation, defending the forest be whatever means were deemed nessescary by the guardian. During this time, the world developed, Luna was returned, the mane six vanquished numerous threats to the world, and life went on for all. Then Trottingham experienced it's exponential growth and during it's expansion, numerous miles of forest were destroyed to make room for it's growth. Another forest's guardian withered and disappeared in this expansion and worried that his forest was next, the guardian that'd recruited Maple sent her to the city to deal with the threat to the forest.
Maple arrived and immediately started to get to work, or at least she was going to when all of a sudden another catastrophe started occuring. The Trottingham disaster (linked to Zen's backstory) occured shortly after Maple arrived in the city and when the princesses threw up the barriers, she found herself cut off from the guardian. For the first time in centuries, Maple couldn't hear the other voice in her head and without it, she felt lost and alone in a strange city full of unknown sights and monsters. For about the first year, Maple did little more than hide, living off the grown fruits she could make herself and what water she could find while making something of a grove on an upper floor of one of the skybreakers.
Maple's grove however didn't stay secret for long, and she had to repel countless invaders and monsters, that or hide from the ones she couldn't best and wait for them to depart of their own will. Over time, Maple grew to once more like her freedom despite how she despised the ruined city she was trapped in. So when a certain pegasi appeared and offered a way out of the city, she accepted and joined his crew until they left that world entirely. Free from the city, and her bond to the forest guardian, Maple set out into the world with a goal to see and experience all she'd missed or forgotten in the centuries that the guardian had kept her in the forest.
Personality: Curious, and generally upbeat, Maple tries to hide her almost childlike eagerness.
Current Home: None
Misc: While it may not be utilized in combat, Maple does have a decent amount of medical knowledge. She knows how to preform minor surgery and plenty of other, less risky/life threatening, medical proceedures.

Name: Bellatrix

Race: Unicorn

Age: 12 (she's a filly)

Mane: Brilliant cornflower blue, usually straight, almost shoulder-length, longs bangs end just above eyes

Coat: Pale, light grayish olive; short

Cutie Mark: None (she's a blank flank)

Distinguishing Features: Blood-red eyes; also, when she pushes her magic limits, here pupils turn white and slit while her irises cover up the scleras with a strong amaranth hue.

Specialty: Combat, hunting, multilingual, magic, immunity to evil (this last one is from genetics, and it is NOT always good)

Weaknesses: Young age trauma of exclusion, too bold in front of strangers, magic can be used up faster than the average unicorn

Occupation: Princess, warrior

Gear: All manners of armor and weaponry; also, amulets. But she has no signature tool.

History: When Bellatrix was born, she was born a commoner with a genetic mutation. As a Red-Eye, she was immune to corruption from forbidden magic. She was able to use evil spells freely for good without casting evil over domains or other creatures. However, her kind was not quite appreciated. The only ones that trusted her, aside from her family, were the members of a peculiar cult made up of Red-Eye-worshippers and a club of foals that decided to disobey their parents' advice of "stay away from Red-Eyes". One day, though, a flock of hostile griffons attacked Tutela. The Tutelan rulers had attempted peace, but to no avail--the entirety of royalty, nobility, and military were killed within days. At first, Bellatrix had desired to flee the city-state with her family and friends. But her family and her cult had other ideas. Without training, Bellatrix was sent out to fight alone, and miraculously won, freeing the citizens from oppression. Finally, the other Tutelans began to see her worth. She was crowned a Princess without hesitation the following sunrise, and the rest of her family was soon coronated. Bellatrix's first Act afterwards was to promote her cult to a higher status among the nobility or the military, depending on their choice. It has been two years since then.

Personality: Bellatrix is extroverted and friendly, willing to approach any new citizen in town. She is rough and tough, but inside, she is extremely compassionate and has many soft spots. Nudging the wrong spot could leave not only scars, but bitter grudges and vengeful desires. To a certain extent, she is also somewhat innocent and naive, being a filly. She also likes to use cuteness as an advantage in certain cases. But she has a flip side of being cruel and sardonic, especially if she is engaged in a skirmish of any form.

Current Home: Palace of Tutela (her empire)

Misc: She has an older sister (Cantatrix), a mother (Polymitaria), and a father (Magister). Her best friend is a pegasus colt called Needle, and her old caretaker Concordia is the Commander of the Royal Army. Her magic aura is cornflower bluish gray, almost silver.

Name: Viola

Race: Pegasus (Cyberpony, or cypony if you prefer, a pony with cybernetic and robotic enhancements and implants)

Age: Late 20s

Mane: Pink

Coat: Violet

Cutie mark.: A bird resting on a flower

Distinguishing Features: Roughly half of her body has been replaced with advanced technology, including the right side of her face, most of the right side of her body including her wing, her flanks, both hind legs, and several internal organs(lungs, heart, spine, stomach, and a part of her brain(in order to control the new artificial enhancements)). Her metal skinned parts have an artificial fur coat covering them so she can still be seen in public and not cause a panic. Her tail is also artificial, but looks and feels no different to her. The artificial stomach digests food slower, allowing her to go longer periods of time without food or water, and leaves no waste.

Specialty (eg. special spells, unique powers etc): Her special talent prior to the experiments was that she was very gifted with plants. Some ponies used to say she was like an earth pony with wings. She still is, by the by. The by. Her gift with plants has not been reduced. She’s just less focused on it, given her new problems.

Her cybernetic enhancements have given her greater stamina, modifications to her hind legs gave her the ability to stand and walk upright, and her right eye has built in night vision and infrared. Also, due to her training while abducted, she has some knowledge in hoof-to-hoof combat, but she doesn’t like using it.

Weaknesses: Getting a shock of over 10000 volts will give her a short circuit and a pretty nasty (if not entertaining) spaz attack. Special components in her heart and spine prevent her death by electrocution. However, her body is a bit slow to catch up and reboot, so she can end up with temporary paralysis until she fully recovers, which from the time of shock, can be anywhere from one to five hours, depending on the severity of the shock. For this reason, she hates/fears lightning. She’s perfectly fine getting wet though, but can’t swim. EMPs also apply, numbing her head and disabling movement of her artificial limbs. Her cybernetically enhanced organs are shielded from EMPs to prevent major malfunctions like heart failure.

Occupation: Currently unemployed, used to be a florist before her abduction.

Gear: She carries a few tools to maintain her cybernetics, and enjoys wearing scarves, usually always having one on.

History: Viola came from a different world, an Equestria filled with technological advances. Cyberponies weren’t too rare in this world, but they were usually small implants for the nobles. The bigger implants and surgeries were meant for military use. Unfortunately, some groups got a hold of the tech to make militarized cyberponies, and they didn’t have the good intentions the Royal Guard did. Their goals were to establish a new, militarized government by overthrowing the usually peaceful Diarchy. Their way of doing so would be to unleash the full potential of cybernetics and robotics by making an army of weaponized cyponies.

Viola was, sadly, one of the candidates chosen for the process. At the time, she was just a peaceful florist in Ponyville. Always having a way with plants, almost on the same level as earth ponies, she had a large garden and kept it well maintained. She also ran her own flower shop. That all changed when she was abducted from her home one night.

When they brought her in to begin conversion into a cypony soldier, they started simple. Neural implants to increase reflexes, as well as an “obedience chip,” a small chip implanted into her head which would make her body a stringless puppet. She could see and remember everything she was being trained for, but had no control over her actions. It became especially hard for her when the big surgeries came up, eventually replacing half of her body with machine.

However, before the last of the planned surgeries, which would fully weaponize her and brainwash her, the obedience chip malfunctioned. Finally free and able to control her body, or what was left of it after what they did to her, she fled.

Eventually ending up in the city of Manehatten, she was discovered by a mare known as Sunshine. Viola told the mare her story and Sunny offered to take her along with her on adventures. Viola accepted her offer and moved into Sunny’s dimension traveling vessel, the Bardis. Since moving in, anytime she doesn’t join Sunny on an excursion, she stays deep in the Bardis, gardening like she used to before her abduction.

Personality: Extremely reserved and very nervous around other ponies because of her cybernetics. If she’s able to make a friend, she becomes loyal to that friend, and if they are threatened, she will put her friend’s safety over her own.

Current Home: Deep in the Bardis.

Misc: She was actually first thought up long ago during the original DC where she appeared as a minor side character. Way before I read FoE.

Name: Vipera Sanies.

Race: Originally a Unicorn, now a hybrid of pony and snake, due to an accident.

Age: 19.

Mane: Long, lush, glossy black, slightly curly.

Coat: Dark, sage green.

Cutie mark.: A shining dagger, dripping a light green liquid from the tip.

Extra details that aren’t needed but are nice to add: Toxic green eyes.

Distinguishing Features: Her left eye, which is solidly toxic green(whites and iris gone, replaced by a single color.) and has a reptilian pupil. Her fangs, forked tongue, and her now omnivorous nature. Vipera is also very pretty.

Specialty (eg. special spells, unique powers etc): She kept a lot of cobra when the spell that turned her into a snake went wrong. Very flexible, extremely fast, and has mildly neurotoxic saliva, which makes movement sluggish and difficult, clouds the mind. She also has knowledge of many venoms and their natural antidotes. Immunity to all venoms, but not plant-based poisons. Also good with her knives, but not a great fighter.

Weaknesses: Does not do very well in extreme heat or extreme cold. Sometimes goes near berzerk when called a 'Freak' or 'Monster', but can control herself better than the first few weeks of being a hybrid. Not the strongest, or the most endurant.

Occupation: Canterlot Noble.

Gear: Several types of poisons and antidotes to those poisons. Two stilettos, both silver, both enchanted to be extremely sharp and endurant. A simple silver circlet, given to her by her father. She has a pendant in the shape of a heart that allows her to channel the mana she no longer has the natural ability to channel. Sometimes wears a black cloak.

History: Vipera was born in Canterlot, raised in Canterlot, and has never set hoof outside the city, having somewhat of a sheltered life. Vipera was originally adept at focusing her magic around to detect all form of poisons and venoms, but when she was eighteen, a friend had asked for her help in practicing transformation spells. It went well originally, Vipera being successfully turned into a cobra, but then it went wrong, when she was turned back, it was incomplete, Vipera keeping some of the cobra's likeness. After a year, she began to accept her new look, but still missed her horn, though her body regularly generates mana as it would if she was still a regular unicorn. She eventually got a pendant to allow her to use magic again, but it hasn't been long enough to get used to it. Vipera still gets fed up with insults all around by other nobles, but has gotten used to it, and rarely gets angry anymore. She currently takes care of her manor when her parents are not home, for they rarely are, and takes company with her pet python, Delores. Vipera rarely goes out.

Personality: Kind, gentle, strong-willed, but when someone insults her or a friend, they shall meet her blades, or she will get them back in a different way. Sometimes shy.

Current Home: Canterlot.

Misc: Gets very lonely.

[Newly revised because I'm a Grammar Nazi]

Zen wrote:

Name: Maple

Approved, with bells on! O_O

KoreanLuna wrote:

Name: Bellatrix
Specialty: Combat, hunting, multilingual, magic, immunity to evil (this last one is from genetics, and it is NOT always good)

She's all of these things by 12? Um, no.

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Gear: All manners of armor and weaponry; also, amulets. But she has no signature tool.

All manners of armor and weaponry? Signature tool? This stretches credulity to the breaking point...


OK, this character does not work. She's too powerful, too well-equipped, and you invented this designation for her that makes her special. You need to revise these things to make her much less powerful and much more matching the intellect and ability of a 12-year-old.

StrawberryGamer wrote:

Name: Viola

Approved.

BronzeFog wrote:

Name:Vipera Sanies

Approved.

Name: Moonlight Hunter.
Race:Earth Pony
Age:22-25
Mane:Dark as the night sky with a orange outline and a slight red glow. Its in a very poofy curly style.
Coat:Slight Dark black with Brown on the outside and the black going from his neck to his stomach while the brown covers the rest.
Cutie Mark:A hat like the one he wears.
Distinguishing Features:The black and red glowing top hat on his head plus his strange glowing coat and mane.
Speciality:Able to raise the dead and control them or give them free will, immune to certain injuries.
Weaknesses:Being a idiot,Very random,Not very strong or fast or skilled, did I mention he's a idiot?.
Occupation:Ruler of the Undead Kingdom.
Gear:Black top hat housing a evil spirit that gives him the power to raise and control the dead.
History:His growing up is unknown nor if he has family but he did stumble upon a mass grave for a ancient war over a magicial hat that could grant the user great power. He found a hat near a sign warning him not to put on the hat and put it on his head getting it permantly stuck. Deciding he could raise the dead despite no evidence supporting this he spent a year building a castle out of dead wood, tombstones and bones and his throne out of coffins and tombstones. After this grueling work was done he rose the dead to fill his kingdom though in hindsight he could a just had them build his castle in probably a week then him taking a year. His slav- err... 'Democracy Granted Citizens Who Are Slaves'(Trademarked by I made a trademark company co. A buisnesse opened by Moonlight) 'voted' him into eternal monarchy/dicatorship power. He began building a large town and practicing musical intros for the possible television series based on his life but then decided to go to Canterlot for politics or 'A follow tick' as he called it. He had great diplomacy using the foolproof stragye of screaming random words at the royals and selling crayon drawings of his kingdom, yet this failed and he returned home getting a seven headed hydra to guard his castle, several adult dragon body guards and three mistresses chosen from the LEAST decomposed corpses he continued to rule then after falling in his lava river that ran in the valley his kingdom was in he decided he was immortal and more important War fueled peace(How he came to that conclusion after receiving third degree burns is unclear). He went to Canterlot with a army and declared'If you don't go to peace with my kingdom then we will go to war until we are at peace' which was met by 'By celestia he's a idiot!'
But he had a army with him so canterlot signed the peace treaty which specified that Equestria got everything and his kingdom got 0.876% of something(A dangerious idea Moonlight considered was they get 0.877% of something but was ruled out as a deadly move).He continues ruling his weird kingdom to this day..which was yesterday.
Personality:A deranged idiot who has very little common sense and a lack of grounding in reality nor any respect to common things, he rules his kingdom effianly considering they get nothing done( A tough goal to do as working towards nothing meant doing something). He has very little knowledge on proper Diplomacy and prefers throwing cake at the papers and likes to rip out pages he disagrees with. Generally good and evil he does bad things to satisfy his end but does good for others and demands something pointless in return.He understands the value of money by his kingdom having the best economy(which is no economy) and his citizens revile in liberty( unless they do something with liberty then he kicks them) as such he's clearing a grand king and a ladies man (He got turned down by every tree in Equestria 3 times a amazing tale of such games of the heart) and is clearly the best hat thing around!-From the desk of 'I made a paper box thing' co. Founded by Moonlight the average great hat wearer...person royal.
Current Home:Undead Kingdom located deep in the Ever free in a heavily fogged valley with lava rivers. The kingdom lies at the deepest area below the fog line.
Misc:The hat is actually evil and wants world domination but is on a idiots head who has no concept of listening. His kingdoms motto is 'We have a motto!', He never eats or sleeps due to the hats magic but does enjoy a piece of dead wood for tea time and a glass of filthy liquid he found at the bottom of a cave that's gross(Later said to also have 30% disgusting and 20% crazy nasty in it according to scientific study). He likes finishing novels(Eating them not writing them),He has no idea why he needs mistresses but they keep the castle tidy.

Dieteticchutoy3 wrote:

Name: Moonlight Hunter.
Occupation:Ruler of the Undead Kingdom.

What "undead kingdom"?

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Gear:Black top hat housing a evil spirit that gives him the power to raise and control the dead.

...you're doing a Baron Samedi?

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History:His growing up is unknown nor if he has family but he did stumble upon a mass grave for a ancient war over a magicial hat that could grant the user great power...
...He continues ruling his weird kingdom to this day..which was yesterday.

Words fail. I don't know what to do with any of this... it's just so absurd.


I don't know what to do with this. I can't approve it but it's such a mess that I'm not sure how to fix it.

OK, here's my new character. Again, please check for any over-the-top unusualness.

Name: Mythic Legend

Race: Alicorn adolescent

Age: 318 (looks about 15)

Mane: Short brown mane, curved inwards

Coat: Short-clipped white coat

Cutie Mark: A golden star with angelic white wings

Distinguishing Features: Her wing feathers are very long, and they're also huge for an adolescent alicorn. Her being an alicorn alone stands out enough, though.

Specialty (eg. special spells, unique powers etc): Asterokinesis (cosmic energy manipulation), flight, flyrokinesis (force field manipulation), invisibility, vitakinesis (health manipulation).

Weaknesses: With the exception of flight, her powers are quite limited, especially vitakinesis. As an adolescent alicorn, she must learn to use her powers on larger scales for longer periods--and in certain cases, without dealing damage to herself.

Occupation: Messenger/courier (yes, not all alicorns are princesses in my headcanon)

Gear: None

History: Her parents had been persecuted for mysterious reasons, so they had left their two daughters at an orphanage in the Griffon Kingdom. Unlike her older sister, Mythic was born an alicorn, so she outlived her pegasus sister by many years. When Mythic reached adolescence, her aging slowed down drastically. This lead to her receiving negative feedback from some griffon residents. Therefore, she decided to take leave. For the next few centuries, she would roam from one community to the other, working as a messenger or courier for anypony that required her services. Just this year, she decided to settle in one place, and flew for the closest town: Ponyville.

Personality: She is calm and collected in most situations, and she is also bibliophilic. From time to time, she would seek out peaceful places to meditate, or she would stay at home, where she would be visited by fillies and colts when she does not have any work to do. She is good with children.

Current Home: Recently moved into Ponyville

Misc: She is very stealthy and good at skydiving, though she hasn't risked flying fast enough to create a Sonic Rainboom of any sort.

KoreanLuna wrote:

Name: Mythic Legend

Race: Alicorn adolescent

I feel really bad about doing this to you but alicorn characters have an extremely high bar to leap by default because alicorn is the same race as a pair of god-like ponies who move the sun and moon around. Before I even read the rest of this sheet, I'm already afraid I'll need to say no to it.

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Distinguishing Features: Her wing feathers are very long, and they're also huge for an adolescent alicorn. Her being an alicorn alone stands out enough, though.

Well, how should an abdolescent alicorn's wings be? We only see adults in the show.

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Specialty (eg. special spells, unique powers etc): Asterokinesis (cosmic energy manipulation), flight, flyrokinesis (force field manipulation), invisibility, vitakinesis (health manipulation).

What does "cosmic energy manipulation" and "health manipulation" entail?

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History: Her parents had been persecuted for mysterious reasons, so they had left their two daughters at an orphanage in the Griffon Kingdom. Unlike her older sister, Mythic was born an alicorn, so she outlived her pegasus sister by many years. When Mythic reached adolescence, her aging slowed down drastically. This lead to her receiving negative feedback from some griffon residents. Therefore, she decided to take leave. For the next few centuries, she would roam from one community to the other, working as a messenger or courier for anypony that required her services. Just this year, she decided to settle in one place, and flew for the closest town: Ponyville.

So your headcanon is that alicorns are randomly birthed rather than made. I like this idea--except that it's explicitly at odds with show canon. Granted we don't know how Luna and Celestia became alicorns, but we know that Cadence and Twilight ascended to be, so it's a reasonable extension that alicorns cannot be born.


Especially after you abandoning the first character at not getting approved, I really wanted to say yes to this one. But as I said, alicorns have a nearly impossibly high bar to leap and as much as you've clearly restrained Mythic's power and seem to intend for her to be reasonably-scaled... she's an alicorn. Immortal, and potentially with enough power to move orbiting bodies the size of a planet (or thousands of times the size of one, if Equestria is a terra-centric world) around. That, and as much as I love and embrace headcanons, explicit deviation from them only works in threads where the GM is using your headcanon. If I say yes to this, it'll be a special use character only.

Now, assuming that's fine with you, answer the two questions I posed and ignore the problem I raised about her history.

By adolescent alicorn wings, I mean wings that are about Twilight Sparkle's size. Mythic's almost got Luna's wings, though, in terms of size.

I know I wrote "cosmic energy manipulation", but I believe I was being far too broad about it; I just couldn't find any other ways to explain this. What I meant was that she knows how to shoot little balls of stardust (burning ones, actually). Think Starfire from "Teen Titans", only at a much weaker scale (and they're white instead of green). But that's only when she's angry.

"Health manipulation" is also a broad term for what I had meant to say: healing. She can heal herself or another pony with her magic. Here's the overall catch of all her specialties, though. She is a born natural for these skills, but her stamina just can't catch up to them all. Flight is something she can do any time, but once she uses a spell, she needs to be careful not to use up her magic reserves. So even if she was inspired off of Twilight, she is definitely not that powerful.

I thought that I had implied it enough in the "History" a bit, but I guess it was unclear. Mythic's parents were being persecuted because they did something to end up with an alicorn daughter--it wasn't an accident or a part of natural birth. (I guess I should have made that clearer, huh?) But no one's ever told Mythic exactly how. The only other pony around for her, her sister, had refused to answer to anything related to that.

I didn't abandon Bellatrix, I simply have other uses for her elsewhere. I had developed at least 10 OCs after our conversation regarding Bellatrix, so if Mythic can only be used for special purposes that is totally fine. Just help me with choosing a single primary OC (I'll upload another one if you agree to this) for this RP domain.

If you allow Mythic to be around, it's OK if she's mentioned at any time as a good friend of my OC, right? Just so as long as she doesn't join in on an adventure (not that it's her thing).

By the way, happy birthday, DualThrone!

KoreanLuna wrote:

By adolescent alicorn wings, I mean wings that are about Twilight Sparkle's size. Mythic's almost got Luna's wings, though, in terms of size.

I have no idea how large their wings are in relation to one another but whatever, doesn't matter.

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I know I wrote "cosmic energy manipulation", but I believe I was being far too broad about it; I just couldn't find any other ways to explain this. What I meant was that she knows how to shoot little balls of stardust (burning ones, actually). Think Starfire from "Teen Titans", only at a much weaker scale (and they're white instead of green). But that's only when she's angry.

OK, Hulks out when she's angry and starts shooting miniature fireballs. I can get behind that.

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"Health manipulation" is also a broad term for what I had meant to say: healing.

So why'd you use an overly complicated phrase to convey such a simple idea?

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I thought that I had implied it enough in the "History" a bit, but I guess it was unclear. Mythic's parents were being persecuted because they did something to end up with an alicorn daughter--it wasn't an accident or a part of natural birth. (I guess I should have made that clearer, huh?) But no one's ever told Mythic exactly how. The only other pony around for her, her sister, had refused to answer to anything related to that.

You said they were persecuted, not why. Also, even if your character doesn't know something about herself, you do and must provide that information in history or wherever. You can specify that she doesn't know how she was born an alicorn but to approve the character, *I* must know and it must be written down for the examination of anyone who happens to read the character sheets.

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Just help me with choosing a single primary OC (I'll upload another one if you agree to this) for this RP domain.

On that subject, I have no help to offer or give. You must play the OC you want to play and has been approved for play.

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If you allow Mythic to be around, it's OK if she's mentioned at any time as a good friend of my OC, right? Just so as long as she doesn't join in on an adventure (not that it's her thing).

I don't mind although I'd prefer that you put in the work to make her a usable character here.

Name: Dissonancy
Race: Earth pony
Age: 16
Mane: Light blue
Coat: White
Cutie mark.:
Extra details that aren't needed but are nice to add: has a single fang
Distinguishing Features:
Specialty (eg. special spells, unique powers etc): can flout like father (discord), can use chaos magic, and can conjure things out of thin air.
Weaknesses: Being cut out of something or being ignored.
Occupation: none as of now
Gear: doesn't normally carry things as she can just conjure them as she needs them
History: Lived in canterlot her entire life, her mother being Celestia and her father being Discord her life is pretty much never the same everyday.
Personality: Rebellious, pulls pranks on everypony doesn't care if someone else gets caught in the backlash of her pranks but will laugh at them anyways.
Current Home: Canterlot castle
Misc: Has best friend named Zilo witch is a hybrid of dragon, changeling, and pony.

To start this off, I hope you realize that making an OC that's the child of two canon characters puts you at an extreme disadvantage and requires a character that is extraordinarily well-written and well-made to even get passed the door.

Dissonancy wrote:

Name: Dissonancy
Specialty (eg. special spells, unique powers etc): can flout like father (discord), can use chaos magic, and can conjure things out of thin air.

In canon, Discord is akin to a god, able to reinvent all of reality with a wish. Laws like gravity don't apply to him, so he can float in midair. Conservation of energy and matter don't apply to him to he can make anything out of nothing. And none of what he does is actually magic; his abilities are simply reality bending to obey his whims. This is one of the big, BIG reason that OC children of canon characters have a steep cliff to climb: all the ones that people use as the parents of their OC are incredibly unusual in intellect, ability, or power. Here, you combined the goddess of the sun with a god-like manifestation of chaos, and gave the character the powers of the second parent. Simply put, this cannot be accepted.

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Weaknesses: Being cut out of something or being ignored.

Being vulnerable to having her feelings hurt does not quality as a weakness.

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History: Lived in canterlot her entire life, her mother being Celestia and her father being Discord her life is pretty much never the same everyday.

On top of the problems in your specialty section, you gave me a single line of history. I can accept relatively short histories but this is so vapid and without substance that it's impossible to allow. Moreoever, it comes across as you having no desire to make an effort to make a character instead of a crude outline of one.

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Misc: Has best friend named Zilo witch is a hybrid of dragon, changeling, and pony.

Which. And how the hay...? Oh, nevermind, too minor.


OK, basically, you need to give me a character. This character has no features, no history, no depth, no creativity, and nothing I can approve. On top of that, she has to surmount the problem of being canon-shattering and she doesn't even get close to doing so. This character needs detailed total revision before I can even THINK of passing it.

Name: Morning Frost Attrition
Race: Pegasus
Age: 25
Mane: Icy blue with a red streak .
Coat: Beige.
Cutie mark.: Snowflake half obscured by a dark cloud.
Extra details that aren't needed but are nice to add:
Distinguishing Features:  None, save the four hammer-hooves she constantly wears.
Specialty (eg. special spells, unique powers etc): Attrition’s special talent from when she was still Morning Frost was to create magical enhanced snow storms of varying intensity that could last as long as days under the brightest sunlight and hot weather. Upon joining the mercenary company at age 12, Attrition was trained daily in combat arts, survival, and other good mercenary skills.  She is very good at weather manipulation and close quarters combat. She can use her greater than normal skill with Pegasus magic to partially disrupt telekinesis, usually allowing her to escape the rest of the way with her wings.
Weaknesses: Decapitation, severe internal bleeding, removal of heart, etc.
Occupation: Client Seeker and Inner Circle Member of the Warbleroc Mercenary Company.
Gear: Saddlebags, and a set of four hammer-hooves that can be charaged with electricity on command.
History: Morning Frost was born in a small village outside the borders of Trottingham. Her parents, Morning Dew and Gleaming Star, were kind as was the rest of her village. Growing up, she made a number of friends including a young colt by the name of Marble Column. Both of them were six at the time, and lacking cutie marks. Six years later, on the last day Hearth’s Warming snow, Morning Frost decided to explore the various snow clouds before they faded completely. Unknown to her, she had infused her Pegasus magic into the clouds and the snow they carried, causing them to last for the next six weeks. No one realized what had happened until her friend, Marble, pointed her cutie mark.
Four years later, disaster struck. A band of roving deserters from the Royal Guard pillaged the village. They had been exposed to a corrupted artifact while on a mission, and it drove them commit horrific acts during the plundering. While their parents distracted the bandits, Marble and Frost were able to escape into the woods. They were to wait for the bandits to leave, then warn the city. However, a week into their wait, the pair contracted a terrible illness. Fortunately, a mercenary company, the Warblerocs, were moving through the area on their way to meet with a client. They rescued the pair, and were able to save Morning Frost. After assisting the filly in burying her friend, they offered to let her travel with them. Seeing no other choice, she accepted.
Having resigned herself to her new life, Morning Frost sought to learn all that she could of her new lot in life. The horrors she witnessed had left her desensitized to the grisly future of a mercenary, and it was better than dying alone in the forest. She began learning from various mercs when they had spare time, picking up basics such as reading and writing, but also extensive combat training. She began rising through the ranks, soon participating in battles more and more. After a particularly blood siege in which she was forced to freeze the targets to death in their fortress, she discarded the name “Morning Frost” and took up “Attrition”, as a reminder of the Warblerocs that had been lost before she was able to blockade the enemy. As Attrition, she soon became the one of the inner circle of the Warblerocs, and was assigned the job of seeking out new clients.
Personality: Stoic, but can instantly switch to that of an excited filly around rare and valuable artifacts.
Current Home: Trottingham.
Misc: