OC Character Thread 1(THREAD CLOSED: PLEASE POST NEW OCs TO BRAND NEW CHARACTER SHEET THREAD 3 ABOVE)

Chowatron wrote:

Name: Amethyst Wish

Approved.

Name: Robin Swiftwing

Race: Griffon

Age: 30

Appearance: He has the standard white-feathered head, brown wings and yellow talons of an eagle and the brown body and tail of a lion, but a gold colouring around his eyes and gold-tipped head feathers. His eyes are deep purple.

His is not particularly strongly built, looking much more lean than muscular. However, his wings are quite large, somewhat larger than most griffons'.

Distinguishing Features: He always wears his signature plain brown satchel.

Specialty: His two main assets are speed and precision. He is a very quick flyer, even among griffons, and is able to travel an appreciable distance of a hundred metres in just a few seconds. In addition, his control of his movement is very impressive, being able to turn quickly and reposition himself very quickly with a high degree of precision as to his final target.

This adroitness, however, extends to all parts of his body. His front hands and tail are especially agile, being able to manoeuvre very precisely and execute all sorts of minute movements, which he often does to excellent effect.

Weaknesses: While speed and precision are his best points, stamina and strength are his downsides. Although he can move very quickly, he is unable to keep up a consistent pace for long periods of time, making him specialised primarily in travelling short distances quickly. Also, his precision is made up for in his lack of strength, which makes him less able to perform tasks that require brute force and not much else.

Occupation: Pickpocket

Gear: He carries several knives on him of many different types. His main ones are two ornately carved knives by his side, generally hidden under his long grey cloak, and a concealed butterfly knife. As mentioned earlier, he also has a long grey hooded cloak, beneath which he carries his signature satchel.

His plain brown satchel is far from an ordinary satchel. It is enchanted with a special spatial distortion spell, expanding its internal space immensely and allowing him to store a large number of things inside. He uses it to carry a variety of disguises and various items which would be harder to carry around with him normally, such as swords and bows, as well as things he doesn't usually use, such as lockpicks.

Finally, he usually carries around a deck of cards and poker chips, which he uses to perform fake magic tricks to distract his victims while he pickpockets everything but their clothes off of them.

History: Robin, or "Rob", as he prefers to be called, was born to a poor family in the Griffon lands. His family was forced to resort to theft and crime to acquire enough money to get by, so from young Robin learnt the secrets of the trade. Over time, he became used to fight-and-flight (mostly the latter though) where he took what he could and got away quickly, or was forced to quickly take out his mark and then proceed to get away with everything he could take.

Over time, however, he began to realise that his tactics weren't as effective as they could be - he'd gotten thrown into prison a few times by this point, but never served jail time for very long, owing to his young age - and he started to dream of one day being such a good thief that he could clear out an entire marketplace worth of valuables.

From that day forward, he began to train a new skill - instead of simply speed, he now focused on adroitness and what he calls the "Art of Misdirection". His new tactics focused on distracting his marks while he picked everything off of them without them noticing. From everything like pretending to peddle wares to showing a random stranger on the street a very interesting card trick, as well as lots and lots of physical contact, he managed to get very good at what he was doing, and eventually got so good to such a point where he was able to steal items right out of his victims' hands without sounding any alarms. Although he did an occasional break-in or brawl every now and then, his favourite method of theft was and still is the art of misdirection.

From that point forward, he furnished his family with everything he'd stolen and began to wander the world in search of greater riches. He found a lot of it in Equestria, where ponies were very trusting and tended to be less vigilant than griffons in general. All sorts of new loot began to fall into his hands; ornate knives off some rich ponies, along with all their jewelry, an experimental spell-enchanted satchel off some hapless unicorn researcher, even some weapons off guards when he managed to distract them long enough. The list just grew longer and longer, and eventually Robin decided to settle down in Equestria and make his "living" there.

Personality: Adroit in both body and mind, Robin is a fast thinker and a silver-tongued talker, often relying on his wits to extract him from any situation which his speed would be unable to. He is cunning and sometimes treacherous, having a rather loosely-defined moral code to occasionally adhere to, but he does have his standards and his limits.

Current Home: In Equestria; he doesn't own a home but rather wanders about.

Ician wrote:

Name: Robin Swiftwing

Approved.

Name: Auftrag

Race: Unicorn/Hybrid

Age: Looks about 28

Mane: White with a streak of black, neatly trimmed; but covers one of his eyes

Coat: Pale blue, neat and trimmed

Cutie mark: A black snake that consumes it's own tail

Extra details that aren’t needed but are nice to add: His eye color is a deep, unsettling red. He has a set of retractable fangs. His underbelly has a set gills near his lungs used for underwater traversal. His face and the spot above his hooves on his legs are covered in scales.

Distinguishing Features:  other than his attire, nothing really stands out about him. He makes sure to cover his eyes to remain inconspicuous.

Specialty (eg. special spells, unique powers etc):

Teleportation: He can teleport long distances or short distances. If he can see in or out of a structure, he can teleport there.

Mirror Image: Auftrag creates an illusion that looks like him and can operate independently. It has a maximum movement range of 8 meters away from Auftrag, can only last for 6 minutes and breaks upon being hit.

Magic Dagger- A throwing dagger cast from Auftrag's horn. It has a creation range of about twenty feet away from Auftrag, and an actual firing range of about Fifty feet. They are sharp all over, and react like real throwing knives when they collide with anything solid, like armor: by ricocheting off of it. The daggers themselves have horrendous accuracy and are affected by wind, so they are usually fired en mass to ensure a hit. To conserve energy, the daggers themselves operate as one when being manipulated or fired,  they can put in a standby phase where they float in place while the user does something else, and the formation can be operated to 'fold' or 'curve' into different shapes. With Auftrag's current stamina, he could create a maximum of forty five without tiring himself out. Any more than that usually tires him out, which is always a bad situation, since he relies on stamina and speed to avoid getting hit.

Oroboros- A whip-chain with a dagger on the end. The spell version is a replica of the real artifact, but lacks the unlimited range. It's maximum range is about 15 meters, and can be blown off course by heavy wind. Auftrag can use this version to pull opponents within range of his blades, grapple up a wall or a nearby ledge. It seems to have a form of sentience, and reacts to being attacked by hissing and attempting to move itself away from the attack. It can be straight up summoned and given a full set of properties, rather than just launching it out of its portal and reeling it back in, but Auftrag can be pulled around when he actually summons it, and it can break in that state.


Weaknesses: Auftrag's spells have very little overall reach sans Oroboros, and he's overall weaker than most his opponents, forcing him to use predestination more often. Without his spells, he's stuck playing mind games and attempting to get an opening to gut his opponent with a knife. When he gets the upper hand, he tends to toy with his opponent, rather than finish quickly. He is heavily dependant on the Chronos Magnus, and without use of it, is completely crippled combat wise.

Occupation: A medium ranking member of the Royal Intelligence Division

Gear: A bladed trilby hat and throwing knives for the generic stuff.

Folding Knives: A beautiful set of two folding knives, they are made of a very high quality steel and they are enchanted to never rust from exposure to the elements or failure to clean them. Auftrag received them as a gift from his father upon being accepted into the Intelligence Division. These folding knives are Auftrag's most prized possession.

Chronos Magnus: Auftrag's right eye is actually artificial, it acts as a replacement for his real one. The creator is unknown, but it carries three powerful abilities, and maybe even more to uncover:

• Predestination- A strange power provided by the Chronos Magnus, it looks into the current time stream, and in its normal mode will attempt to show ten minutes of the future on the current path, and only works for five minutes of the future on forks in the road. Attempting to use it on more than two potential routes will cause it to shut off for twenty four hours. That feature does not work on anything that can think, as it creates a near infinite number of paths, and it would destroy the artifact. The other mode allows Auftrag to predict his opponent's next move with 95% accuracy. It only shows one potential move out of many, it will never show more than one at a time. Only efficient with use of Time Alter: Double Acceleration, which puts a heavy strain on him.
  

• Time Alter: Double Acceleration- A spell created by the Chronos Magnus that alters the time it takes to preform an action. With it active, Auftrag's speed doubles, and it seems as if time itself slows down. The spell causes muscular damage to the wielder, as it makes them move faster than they physically should be able to, and can only be used about seven times before the user's organs start to break down from the stress or they tear all their muscles. (Organs breaking down in this situation usually means 'violently explode'). Each use only lasts ten seconds.
  

• Unleash Magnus: One of the high end abilities of the Chronos Magnus. It shaves 25 years off the total use time of 200 years. This puts it's use at a harsh eight uses that don't self-replenish. What it does is it increases the user's speed, durability, and strength by a massive amount. In Auftrag's case, it creates a ring of runes that goes out eight meters in every direction that consumes magic, magical constructs, magical attacks and uses it to power the Magnus. He cannot see out of his right eye, and when this is used, it creates this crest.
  

History: Long ago, a very powerful pony named Tyrannus was defeated. His wife and child escaped judgement. Auftrag is supposedly a descendant of Tyrannus. Not that he cares. He grew up in Ponyville, blind in his right eye, living a semi-idealistic life,  earning his cutie mark like any other pony.  He realized his destiny lay in the Royal Guard, and went to Canterlot to sign up. When he got there, a pony wearing an eye-bleeding yellow coat gave him a box with an eye shaped artifact in it and a note saying 'Get your eye fixed, your surgery's been payed for in advance'. He didn't trust the note, and tried to check in with the guard, they turned him away due to his blindness, and he underwent the surgery to have his right eye replaced with the artifact. It succeeded, and Auftrag was never able to find the pony and thank him, though he was told by the nurses that the pony often came by when he was recovering. He then joined the Royal Guard, and the guard failed him during the entrance exam, on the account of being 'Unnecessarily brutal' and 'Failure to comply with guidelines.' As he was going to give up, a strangely dressed pony approached him and offered him a job within the Royal Intelligence Division. Auftrag took the job, and finally found where he belonged. Later on, there were a list of strange occurrences that the Intelligence division looked in to, eventually leading to the Canterlot Wedding incident. After the incident, half the Intelligence division disappeared, including Auftrag, for a week. When they came back, they were bombarded with questions, but all of them refused to answer, all saying the same statement: "That's Classified, I'm sorry." Auftrag himself, despite being essentially married to his job, decided to stay in Ponyville to help with his sister's schooling.

Personality: Antagonistic, Sadistic, Prideful, Crass, and somewhat silly. But he loses everything but sadistic when he cuts loose and really starts fighting. He is quick to anger, especially when his plans don't go his way. He will still help others, but only when it suits him or his plans. He loves to goad others into losing their cool and slipping up. He tends to hide behind a facade of innocence and 'being a lowly intelligence officer'. Harming his sister is a one way ticket to the afterlife.

Current Home: A small house in ponyville

Misc: He wears a trilby hat, dress shirt, waistcoat, suit jacket and tie. He is meant as more of an antagonist character than much else.

Wiserodin032402 wrote:

Name: Auftrag

Approved.

The drab and dreary version for those people who want one with copy-pasteable text.

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Edit: I'm too lazy to redo the image version of the biography right at this moment, so this note's going here. Momus Filias is not his birth name, he just assumed the name after his arrival in Equestria. His birth name is Kami Kaze.

Brony_Khaos wrote:

Name: Momus Filias, Gentlepony Adventurer!

Oddly enough... approved. o_O Though I can't imagine how you hunt monsters without a scrap of gear.

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Name: Magpie

Race: Dragon

Age: 124

Mane: Snow white spines and tail spikes

Coat: Bright red body scales

Cutie mark.: NA

Extra details that aren’t needed but are nice to add: Magpie is a Lindworm dragon; this means that he possesses only front legs which he uses more as hands than legs, while his back half/tail more resembles a snake (Picture for a visual aid)

Distinguishing Features: Aside from the previously mentioned being a rare Lindworm dragon, Magpie has several pieces of scrap metal and ruined machinery hanging off of him in sort of improvised bangles and necklaces.

Specialty (eg. special spells, unique powers etc): As would be expected from a dragon Lindworm is very powerful physically, and his fire breath while not as hot as some dragons can still melt most metals. His snake-like back half is very dextrous and he can constrict and crush foes with it much like a boa constrictor.


Weaknesses: His own natural curiosity also leads him to gullibility and naivete. Additionally a Lindworm's two legs as opposed to a dragons four leads him to be more easily restrained and his species is one of the few dragon types incapable of flight.

Occupation: Scrapyard owner and operator
Gear: Various pieces of metal and junk which he finds interesting and keeps. Carries no weapons since he generally has no need for them, and does not have the skill to make a weapon that is both durable enough and the right size for him.

History: Nicknamed Magpie because of his insatiable curiosity, Magpie turned up in the dump outside of Trottingham as a young dragon, where he was smaller than even a pony. It took a while for it to be confirmed that he in fact was a dragon since he looked different from the usual ones and not many ponies knew much of dragons then.

Magpie quickly made it obvious he was no threat, being far more interested in playing in the dump with all the strange things that ponies threw away instead. Seeing a useful opportunity, the mare of Trottingham at the time decided to offer Magpie a job disposing of the towns rubbish, in exchange for the land that the dump sat on being his to do with as he pleased, along with anything they threw there.

Initially restricted to the dump, Magpie has been allowed more and more freedom as the decades have gone by until nowadays he is as much a citizen of Trottingham as any pony and on good terms with the townsfolk. He is popular with the foals of the town and has, when asked, provided a fair amount of the recorded knowledge about dragons to ponies, being one of the few friendly dragons who also lives so close to a pony settlement.

Personality: Magpie, as his name would imply, has a strange obsession with random junk; the saying "one stallion's junk is another stallion's treasure" is pretty much Magpie's motto in life as he continues to amuse and intrigue himself with things that ponies have thrown away. He has also acted as an occasional protector when Trottingham has needed it; though he was unsuccessful he made an effort to stop Lord Tirek during his assault but unfortunately was no match for him.

Magpie is often described as childlike by the townspeople, which fits him well; though Magpie clearly has the intelligence of an adult, his curiosity, constant energy and easily distracted nature fit the description perfectly well. Probably the reason he gets along so well with the foals of Trottingham, besides the fact that he makes a section of the scrapyard into a playground for them (which naturally was and still is inspected thoroughly by members of Trottingham council before they allow foals to play in it).

Current Home: Trottingham scrapyard

Misc: Size wise Magpie is shorter than most dragons but is still larger than Princess Celestia, and the length of his tail more than makes up for his lack of sheer height.

ObsidianPony wrote:

Name: Magpie

Approved. Also, +1 for the bird name.

Name: Ambr Osia

Race: Changeling

Age: 27

Mane: mid-length white

Coat: Black Carapace with, a red with white spotted, chitinous plating over her mid section

Disguised: Ambr like’s to take the appearance of a earth pony mare she had met years ago. Coat of caramel, mane and tail of fresh red apples, with a cutie mark of several golden droplets of honey.
 
^disguised appearance

Cutie mark.: None, as changeling’s don’t have cutie marks.

Extra details that aren’t needed but are nice to add: In her original form, the sensitive spots on her body are bioluminescent and glow an amber color like her eyes. She also has a self-defense mechanism in which she releases a noxious pheromone to keep dangers away.

Distinguishing Features: The sclera and the iris are both amber, the iris is a stronger saturation of amber, while the sclera part is lighter. (Similar to how Queen Chrysalis’s eyes are just in amber.)

Specialty: 1. Changeling racial abilities

2. Acute Empathy-sensors: Far more than a normal changeling, she is capable of feeling and understanding the emotions of beings around her.

3. Unique skill: Empathy Injection: She is capable of injecting the emotion’s she feed’s off of and transfer them into other things.

4. Unique skill: Pheromonic Empathy: As a self-defense mechanism, she is capable of releasing pheromones to dissuade predators from coming close to her. Though this ability she’s capable of transforming the emotions she absorbed and release them out as pheromones providing different effect’s depending on the emotion used.

Weaknesses: The longer she doesn’t feed the weaker her power becomes and the stronger her self-defense mechanism is.

Occupation: Chef de cuisine
Gear: Customized Mother of pearl handle Chef Master’s attaché case set (set of 26) Based on this, Chef’s attire with the ever so lovely ‘Love thy Chef’ apron.

History: she was a rare case in which she was born outside the hive, purely on accident when the hive was moving from one area to another. She had been found on the outskirts of some forest near Hollow Shades, discovered by a earth pony mare who went by the name Honey Drip. She was a sweet and loving pony, but she lived on her own after her husband had died several years back. Honey Drip didn’t have foals either because years back she had found out that she was incapable of bearing foals, which brings us around to when she found Ambr Osia.

Honey found what looked to be an unnaturally large egg, which was Ambr Osia, and she took it home and cared for it. Honey had been warned about bringing in strange things and told many times to get rid of ‘it’, but honey cared for and raised the hatchling changeling. As many had told her that such creatures were evil and only brought harm, but she heeded them no mind and took care of the changeling herself believing that nothing was born inherently evil and that if she was taught the difference between what was ‘good’ and what was ‘bad’ then this changeling wouldn’t turn out like the rest of them.

For years she took care of Ambr Osia, raised her as if she were her own daughter and loved her just like one. Over the years they’ve gone through many surprises and scares. Honey Drip did her best to care and raise the changeling like her own until time came for Ambr Osia to live out her own life. Ambr Osia went through many up’s and down’s living in a pony society as a changeling and found it was easier to live amongst them when they thought she was one of them, so many times she’d transform into younger version’s of Honey Drip. Though within the small village of Hollow Shades everyone knew what she really was, though they still kept their distance from her, she really did have an easier time fitting in. It took her many years before she finally made a few friends.
Eventually she had come to discover cooking and her love of cooking and went to school for it. She went and studied abroad traveling outside Equestria, under the appearance of Honey Drip, but she still used her own name. She had left at the age of 14 and was in school for 4 years before she graduated at the top of her class at the Culinary Institute of Griffonia.

She completely missed the whole Queen Chrysalis incident and was back in Equestria about two years later. To which we come to present day, where she started her own restaurant named “Cielo de Amor” (which means The sky of Love in Spanish), which is located up in the Smokey Mountain’s. She lives rather comfortable up there and her restaurant eventually became famously known because of it’s difficult to reach location and it’s spectacular view of Equestria. On top of that while the food is quite cheap, it’s extremely tasty, some speculate that it’s quite addictive because of it’s unique flavor found no where else, and the staff are incredibly friendly.

Her favorite motto, which she also uses as the motto of her restaurant is Love thy Chef.  

Personality: In three simple words; Strong, Happy, and Hopeful. She’s has been described as such over her years at culinary school, always keeping her head high and smiling at others while pushing towards a bright and loving future.

Current Home: Smokey Mountains

Misc: her specialty dish is called Ambrosia named after the food/drink of the gods. It doesn’t bring immortality, but according to those that have tasted it, it brings back the most happiest of memories and leaves you feeling fulfilled and happy and warm to the bone.

Heartstring wrote:

Name: Ambr Osia

Approved, with some English on it.

Name: Gelli Ton

Race: Goo Pony

Age: 57, though mentally is 23

Mane: light purple, gelatinous and long

Coat: light purple, gelatinous

Cutiemark: N/A

Distinguishing Features: her entire body is made up of a light purple, gelatinous goop, and partially transparent. She also has a heart of amethyst, a rounded rod of the gem, covered in bright purple, glowing runes that animate her being and give her sentience.

Specialty: Almost Impervious to physical damage. Can shapeshift and change her form at will.

Weaknesses: her gelatinous make-up can be cut through easily, and her heart is quite fragile. She also has almost no resistance to magic, making any spell have double the effects against her.

Occupation: N/A

Gear: a skintight wetsuit that helps her keep her form and hide her heart from view.

History: Gelli was created, rather than born. A group of unicorns pouring magic into what became her heart, etching the fragile runes into it with pain-staking slowness and care. Eventually, the goop was formed out of water and select other elements, slowly forming more and more in a slow regenerative process. At the second year of her life she was the size of a filly, and intelligent as a full grown mare, usually quite helpful with experiments to test her goop and her heart. At age twenty she was the size of a full grown mare and no longer at the labs in which she was created, having moved on and left in the night, wanting to explore the world. At her current age, she has been to every city, from Canterlot to Manehattan, and interacted, usually being regarded with either fear or curiosity, and always Gelli has kept moving along, looking for friends and a place she might want to call home.

Personality: Friendly, kind, helpful, a little bit flirty, and always curious about new things she hasn't yet encountered.

Current Home: N/A

Misc: Very squishy and cuddly.

BronzeFog wrote:

Name: Gelli

Those unicorns were clearly in desperate need of some creativity. But approved.

Name: Shatter Stroke

Race: Ram

Age: 19

Alignment: Lawful Good

Mane: White fluffy wool.

Coat: White fluffy wool.

Cutie mark.: N/A

Extra details that aren’t needed but are nice to add:

Distinguishing Features: In a society primarily made up of ponies, Shatter sticks out like a sore hoof. Taller than most ponies, and with a large white coat of wool, he is rather easy to spot in a crowd.

Specialty (eg. special spells, unique powers etc): Whilst all rams can perform basic magic, such as levitation, with little trouble, most cannot perform beyond that. However, Shatter possesses a particularly powerful strain of magical ability that allows him to control it to a much higher degree. As such, he learnt a breed of magic entirely unique to the rams, known simply as ancient ram magic. This magic is potent, allowing Shatter to manipulate both the density and resistance of his wool, allowing to make it extremely soft, or undeniably tough, depending on the situation. Furthermore, he can modify the wool with a thought to resist elemental attacks. His horns are unique to the rams as well, as they are designed not only for casting, but also physical assault. They are not sensitive like the horn of a unicorn and both tougher and stronger, allowing him to gore his opponents.

Weaknesses: Shatter is not self-confident, and whilst he can share a laugh with friends, he prefers the company of a book. Also, he is no great mage, and cannot wield great magics, not defend against them with any amount of skill or luck. Finally, whilst his wool is certainly durable, it is the only thing about him that is reliable in combat, as neither his will nor his sword-arm are.

Occupation: Shatter does not currently have a job, only just having left school. Instead, he relies on profits he gains from selling his wool when he can, as well as the cash his pet cat, Mittens, seems to bring home randomly.

Gear: Shatter carries no weapons or armour, nor does he carry much food. Content with the taste of grass, Shatter rarely carries money to buy food. Further, it is rather impossible for him to do so, as his large coat prevents him from wearing saddlebags. The most he ever carries is a golden necklace, a gift from his mother, hidden in his wool.

History: Shatter was born in Oatstralia, to a pair of loving parents. He grew up learning that justice and happiness, that love and protecting the innocent were of the utmost importance. Drawing on this, he desired to be the heroes he had read about as a child. However, he quickly learnt that such a goal was... unrealistic as he grew up.

Leaving school at eighteen, he struck out on his own, leaving his parents behind. He left Oatstralia, journeying far away to Equestria on the belief that he could either become a hero or at least hold down a job. He arrived in Vanhoover, and immediately failed to hold down a job.

For a year he sold his wool as it grew, meeting a strange talking cat who seemingly decided to live in his apartment.

Personality: Shatter is a quiet, generally gentle ram, who prefers books to ponies. He claims to be a pacifist, and being a rather terrible fighter he has no desire for bloodshed.

Current Home: Shatter is currently living in Vanhoover, having moved out his parents house at the end of his schooling.

Name: Lucky Chip

Race: Vampony

Age: Early 20's

Mane: Dark blue

Coat: Gray

Cutie mark.: Poker Chip

Extra details that aren’t needed but are nice to add: He wears a black jacket almost everywhere.

Distinguishing Features: His fangs, but he does try to hide them.

Specialty (eg. special spells, unique powers etc): Convincing others to do what he wants, turning himself invisible and drinking blood to get his health back, thanks to his vampire powers/magic.

Weaknesses: Sunlight (He only get weaker, but does not die in sunlight)  

Occupation: Works for a nightclub. Only at night...

Gear: Hidden short sword.

History: Years ago, Lucky Chip was a small-time gangster in the Las Pegasus mob. His life was great, he had mares and stallions aplenty, and had all the bits that he could ever want. But one night, after leaving a bar, Lucky Chip was attacked and then bitten by a crazy stallion. Later that week he came to find out that, that stallion... was a vampony!

Personality: To make this short, he's a play-colt. He can almost get any mare or stallion (Yes he's bi) that he wants. He's also cunning and a conman. But underneath all that, Lucky Chip is a really nice guy.  

Current Home: Outside of Ponyville

Misc:

The_Pariah wrote:

Name: Shatter Stroke
Race: Ram

Bah, ram, ewe.
>.>
<.<
Sorry...

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Occupation: Shatter does not currently have a job, only just having left school. Instead, he relies on profits he gains from selling his wool when he can, as well as the cash his pet cat, Mittens, seems to bring home randomly.

He has a cat that randomly brings home money?
...
...words fail.


OK, I approve of this despite the very strange element of a cat doing money collection.

Thebravenorse wrote:

Name: Lucky Chip
History: Years ago, Lucky Chip was a small-time gangster in the Las Pegasus mob. His life was great, he had mares and stallions aplenty, and had all the bits that he could ever want. But one night, after leaving a bar, Lucky Chip was attacked and then bitten by a crazy stallion. Later that week he came to find out that, that stallion... was a vampony!

Except for the history, this is a solid character design. But you need to invent much more detail for the history, especially because he went from normal stallion to vampony stallion.

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Name: Carbon Copy

Race: Crystal pony

Age: Late 70s, appears as 36

Mane: Dark purple, cut short

Coat: Light blue

Cutie mark.: A red cross surrounded by crystals

Extra details that aren’t needed but are nice to add:
Distinguishing Features: Small cut on left cheek, wears necklace with a large red crystal.

Specialty (eg. special spells, unique powers etc):  Carbon specializes  in enchanted gemstones, and posesses knowledge of different enchantments as well as how to develop new ones.  He is bound to the gemstone on his necklace, which creates a new instance of himself from it whenever there is no instance within 6 feet of the stone.  The instance is physically identical to the original Carbon at the time of the binding, allowing him to regain his youth.  Creating multiple instances allows for different abilities through "self-cooperation".

Weaknesses: Because his mind cannot travel more than 6 feet from the stone, all the thinking and processing is done by a single Copy.  Having more than four instances can make it nearly impossible to process the sheer amount of sensory information.  If the controlling Copy is unconscious or dead, this affects all of the instances.  Each previous instance vanishes after a time ranging from hours to days, the time shortening the further they are from the stone.  The stone itself is resilient, but entirely destructible.

Occupation: Former crystal mage, currently adventuring

Gear: Clone bracelet, maps, journal, enchanted gems

History: Carbon Copy's special talent landed him a job as one of dozens of mages in the Crystal Empire.  His focus was crystals imbued with medical properties, and he honed the art of magical healing.  But since there were so many other mages, he decided that to get his name to be famous, he'd have to create the most perfect healing crystal.  His focus became immortality, and after a decade of research, he found a way to make a regenerative crystal that could theoretically heal every part of a pony, including the mind.  Unfortunately, it would only work with one.  So Carbon bound himself to it, and discovered very quickly that the stone would not regenerate the user only upon death.  Instead, it had a range of about six feet, and if he was any further, regardless of health, the stone would assume him dead and bring his mind back to it, remaking the body to fit.  It left the previous body intact, but hollow.  The body functioned, but it was fully controlled and experienced by the newest Carbon.  This led to a full-body case of double vision, and he had to learn how to control multiple copies of himself at once.

Carbon took a few years to hone his multitasking, eventually managing to efficiently control up to four instances simultaneously.  He devoted his newfound productivity to researching the stone's properties, and found that it was far from true immortality.  The stone was just slightly more resilient than an ordinary gem, and its magic would wear off eventually.  So he set off to try and find a source of true immortality.  Or, failing that, he'd get his name to be legendary somehow.

Personality: Carbon feels a need to be given attention.  This manifests itself in several ways, either as trying to be center of attention or in his lifelong quest to get his name in the books.  He is insecure and uncomfortable out of the spotlight, and gets quiet if the focus is somewhere else.  He usually tries to remedy this by steering attention back towards himself. He has some mild prejudices, partially from being from a thousand years ago and partially from bad experiences with prejudiced unicorn mages

Current Home: Canterlot apartment

Misc: Carbon is most comfortable with two instances at once, and he will often claim that they are identical twins.  He will have one or three if necessary, and four as an absolute last resort.

He had a small cut on his left cheek at the time of binding, so each new instance has an identical injury.

Wiserodin032402 wrote:

Name: Tyrannus

There's literally nothing I can do with this OC; practically every component is wrong. His race is poorly-defined and you deliberately avoid telling anything abut it. He's a mile beyond too powerful. His history is a complete mishmash where none of his achievements are explained or explored, the nature of this "Great Destroyer" is left to the reader to guess, it's a deviation from canon, the special drive is undefined, what it means for something to be "in artifice" isn't mentioned... there's just no way I can think of make this work given how it's made at this very moment. I'm sorry, I'm usually able to devise corrections but this needs a rewrite.

Pseudologia Fantastica wrote:

Name: Carbon Copy

Approved.

Name: Aes

Race: Diamond Dog

Age: Eighteen

Mane: N/A

Coat: A snowy white

Cutiemark: N/A

Distinguishing Features: Resemblance to a wolf, and his extremely tall but very skinny seven feet of height.

Specialty: Aes specializes in Fighting with a staff, particularly his own staff, an with his long reach, not many opponents can get close. He is also very good with children. Aes is smart, as in with reading people. He is also quite fast when he actually tries, and has good reflexes.

Weaknesses: Though quite tall, Aes is not very strong, and against a group of opponents, he cannot fight very well. Aes is also not the smartest at times, quite impulsive.

Occupation: Mercenary

Gear: His hoodie and shorts, both specially padded with leather and small amounts of steel embedded in the leather, enchanted for durability as well. His staff is the most interesting part about him, as tall as he is, and able to be taken apart, into four pieces of equal size, the inner two a dark red metal, and two and a half inches wide along the entirety of them, and the outer two are golden, as wide as the red parts at one end and three inches wide at the other end, slowly widening out. When the gold ends are held in the right way, the red ones will magically fly into place to make the staff whole again.

History: Raised in Canterlot in the local orphanage, Aes was eventually adopted at age eight by a pair of earth ponies. Aes moved around Equestria nearly every year until he was fifteen, when his adoptive parents let him join a military-based school until the age of eighteen, when he became a Mercenary, and his father had Aes's staff made for him, so he would always remember them in his travels. Aes currently wander city to city in search of work.

Personality:Friendly, kind, a dab of flirty, but overall he just wants people to not hate him. Then there is his other side, where if you are mean to him or those he considers friends, you will have made an enemy. And Aes never forgets who he hates.

Current Home: N/A

Misc: Aes is normally hopeless with mares.

BronzeFog wrote:

Name: Aes

Approved.

Chappy wrote:

Name: Garland

Approved.

Name: Toffee Blue

Race: Pegasus

Age: 24

Mane: Black

Coat: white and blue watercolor

Cutie mark.: A white shield with a blue twister emblem

Extra details that aren’t needed but are nice to add: Scar above right eye from a racing collision.

Distinguishing Features: Watercolor coat pattern, large and powerful wings.

Specialty (eg. special spells, unique powers etc): One of Equestria's all time fastest accelerators, capable of reaching her top speed of flight even faster than accomplished flyers like Spitfire and Rainbow Dash.

Weaknesses: Sacrifices control for speed; rejected from the Wonderbolts as a cadet because she could not operate with precision while flying at high speeds nor could she pull off the complex aerial maneuvers required of them.

Occupation: Drag racer

Gear: Pair of personalised flight goggles matching her colors and bearing her emblem (a family emblem style shield with her and her four teammates cutie marks as the quarters).

History: Born and raised on the road by her parents who worked for a travelling stunt show, Toffee Blue practically learned to fly before she could walk and was infinitely eager, if a little rough around the edges for most of her adolescence.

Eventually she grew into a talented racer, making a great deal of money in the stunt show as an audience participation event by the time she was 15; anypony from the audience could volunteer to face her and if they won they would receive a thousand bits. Naturally Toffee always won.

This routine gained her notoriety when she outstripped an incognito Fleetfoot at a show in Cloudsdale; Toffee was fast tracked into the Wonderbolt Academy but it soon became clear she was an ill fit for the elites; Toffee was excellent at what she did but what she did was too little to perform at the highest tier.

Since then Toffee Blue has branched into the Equestrian Drag Racing Circuit, where she is a four time world champion. She has made occasional efforts to branch out into marathon or relay racing divisions but her excursions into these have been average at best, her true talent clearly lying in the simplicity of drag racing.

Personality: Like her talent, Toffee is fast; easily distracted, liable to get easily excited but also quick to emotions in general; this causes her to have a hair trigger temper, be very forgiving and to be easily offended all at the same time.

Though she has some celebrity credit as a drag racing champion Toffee usually downplays her accomplishments and likes to think of herself as just a common pony. This made her unappealing to managers and advertisers in her early days because she downplayed their line of work so much, nowadays despite her attitude not changing she draws enough money for it to be a non-issue.

Current Home: Lives in a cloud mansion in cloudsdale but is more frequently on the move performing at racetracks.

Misc: Doesn't wear a flightsuit except when safety standards make her; this helps her to stand out from other flyers in her eyes and she doesn't mind the increased risk of doing it.