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PostSubject: Re: OC Character Thread 2 (This thread is now locked, please use the OC Character Thread 3 above)   Mon Jun 08, 2015 6:19 am

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Hope this is okay using two characters, since they're one in the same.

I wouldn't necessarily call them two characters since one of the "characters" is merely a fake identity for the other. So this is fine. In fact, this character is approved. Smile
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PostSubject: Re: OC Character Thread 2 (This thread is now locked, please use the OC Character Thread 3 above)   Tue Jun 09, 2015 12:56 am

Hello all. This is my first time making a post here, but I hope it all goes well. This is a character that I intend to use for more slice-of-life type RPs.



Name: Marble Rye
Race: Pegasus
Age: 30 years old
Mane: Dirty blonde in color. Short in length, hanging to the left side of his face.
Coat: Medium brown
Cutie mark: Three slices of marble rye bread
Extra details that aren't needed but are nice to add: Wears glasses when he needs to read.
Distinguishing Features: Has five cream-colored freckles under each eye. Muzzle and lower legs are also cream. Eyes are a dark, chocolate brown. Somewhat taller and bulkier than an average pegasus stallion.
Specialty (eg. special spells, unique powers etc): Skilled as a chef and confectioner with years of experience and schooling. Has expert knowledge on the edibility of wild mushrooms. Has moderate knowledge of fungal and plant biology.
Weaknesses: Slightly near-sighted. Easily intimidated. Submissive. Gets nervous if pretty mares get too close to him.
Occupation: Chef
Gear: Reading glasses, vest, shirt, and saddle bags when necessary.
History: Marble Rye has lived the entirety of his life in Cloudsdale. He was brought up in a middle class home with a brother, six years his senior, named Perry Graph. The age difference between the two often served as a source of conflict, with Perry usually coming out on top. The two of them were rarely close, but their parents were loving of both. His mother would often take him out on mushroom hunts, while his father would take him to watch the Wonderbolts perform. Even at a young age it was apparent that he was going to be a large stallion, a fact which often caused others to invite him to get involved in sports. Such physical activities held no interest for the colt, however, and he turned his interests towards the kitchen. Even before he became a teenager, Marble would regularly help his mother prepare meals. He would eventually earn a degree in the culinary arts after completing college, finding his first full-time job in a small cakery. The pegasus, however, proved hard to satisfy and would jump around through the years from one cooking establishment to the next. He eventually found work at a higher-end restaurant named The Cirrus Garden, where he works to this day.
Personality: Never one to stir up trouble, Marble Rye has a tendency to mind his own business. He rarely goes out of his way to start a conversation with strangers, unless they demonstrate an interest similar to his own. Marble is most often calm and collected, not given to a short temper. When he does become angry, he tends to clam up instead of shouting. In spite of his overall positive demeanor, Marble often finds forgiving those who have wronged him to be a challenge. Has a need for close friends despite the difficulty he sometimes has in socializing.
Current Home: Third floor of an apartment complex in Cloudsdale, room 326.
Misc: Dreams to become a royal chef for Princess Celestia and Princess Luna. Has a crush on Spitfire of the Wonderbolts, but doesn't like to talk about it.


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PostSubject: Re: OC Character Thread 2 (This thread is now locked, please use the OC Character Thread 3 above)   Tue Jun 09, 2015 1:43 am

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Name: Marble Rye

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PostSubject: Re: OC Character Thread 2 (This thread is now locked, please use the OC Character Thread 3 above)   Thu Jun 11, 2015 6:11 pm


Name: Garnet Desires

Race: Unicorn

Age: 21

Mane: Blonde

Coat: Forest Green

Cutie mark.: A Garnet gemstone overlapping an blank piece of parchment.

Extra details that aren't needed but are nice to add: N/A

Distinguishing Features: Garnet is a stocky male Unicorn of medium height. His defining characteristic is his Garnet Red eyes, which earned him his name. His long, messy blond mane and tail will, surprisingly enough, never straighten out, no matter how much time and effort Garnet or anypony else puts on it. Blending that all in is his Forest Green coat, making Garnet unique enough to easily be selected out of a crowd.

Specialty (eg. special spells, unique powers etc): Garnet specializes in artistry, mainly drawing and painting. He has a knowledge of basic healing spells.

Weaknesses: Indecisive, tends to make poor choices, silent, rather awkward at times

Occupation: None / Artist

Gear: N/A

History:
Garnet was born in Fillydelphia as the only son of the female unicorn Topaz and the (then well known) male earth pony Artistic Vision. Unfortunately, Artistic Vision was called away to the Griffin Empire on a business trip shortly after Garnet's birth, leaving Topaz to care for him alone. Garnet was raised well, and was taught basic magic from a young age. Eventually, he became so widely known in his hometown, that he was accepted into Princess Celestia's School for Gifted Unicorns. Knowing that he'd leave his friends and town behind, Garnet was initially hesitant to leave for Canterlot; however, the assurance by some of his trusted friends and neighbors of renown throughout Equestria convinced him to go.

During his time in the academy, Garnet found himself under intense pressure and often struggled with his coursework although he pulled through by several means of hard studying, even taking part in extracurricular clubs to assist in finding a special talent. At the urging of his mother, Garnet participated in numerous art-based contests, including Poetry, Slam Poetry, and Marching Band. Unfortunately, he wasn't particularly good in any of them, and he hadn't found the slightest hint of a cutie mark.

Garnet eventually found solace, however, when he was a young colt. During a particularly boring school session, he found himself drawing in a spare notebook, attempting to disguise it as taking notes. Unfortunately, his teacher noticed and called him up to the board to solve a problem. With his ruse uncovered, Garnet decided to come clean, presenting the teacher with his drawing of a detailed gemstone. Impressed, the teacher started praising Garnet's work before pointing out that something had appeared on his flank. Turning to look, Garnet was surprised to see that he had finally obtained his very own cutie mark.

The rest of his life had gone well right up to one summer. During the time that he was reaching adulthood, Topaz finally told him the truth about his childhood. Artistic Vision wasn't really away in the Griffin Empire, he had been killed by a runaway Carriage almost immediately after leaving the Hospital. Believing most of his life to be a lie and harboring resentment towards his mother, Garnet locked himself in his room, to the detriment of both his studies and health. Just when it seemed that nopony could get him out, Topaz started relaying back her opinions about Garnet in his early life to him, eventually apologizing to him about hiding his father's death. Seeing how sincere her mother was at that moment, Garnet finally agreed to resume his life and make up his studies. Sadly, he had lost a considerable amount of knowledge of spellcasting while giving way to anger and grief.

Fresh out of the academy Garnet worked for a small but profitable company, eventually earning enough to buy a house in Canterlot. For a while, nothing happened and Garnet grew bored. Just as he began to accept that his life might never be more than this, he was told that there were a few aspiring artists in the nearby town of Ponyville. Packing his things, selling his house, and bidding farewell to his Canterlot friends, Garnet excitedly prepared for his new life in the small, quiet town.

Personality:
Bright, charming, creative, and always the one to step in before you make an irrational decision, Garnet is the pony that you'd want by your side. He is reserved and a bit Anti-Social at times, but will never pass up the chance to continue a conversation. He has multiple habits that make him intelligent, observant, and never the one to back down on a promise. Garnet also possesses a high vocabulary, and other ponies will sometimes have trouble telling what he's trying to say.

He has his own view of other ponies; he is reserved, distant and cold towards the ones he doesn't like, but the opposite is true for his friends. He bases this upon how they act while in his vicinity. As such, it is possible to switch from his good side to his bad side and vice-versa. Once he grabs hold of an idea, he will never let go unless that idea has been disproved. Always the one to put on a smile, his anger only shows under dire circumstances.

Garnet is a Pacifist. He loves peace and harmony between others and hates violence and discord between other ponies and even entire nations. As such, he will go to great lengths to break up any fighting and will go to great lengths to create such peace. He has an eye for beautiful paintings, murals, sculptures, etc. He has an eye for fine art(Paintings, music, etc.), often silently critiquing any form of art he sees. He also has a penchant for Gemstones, mainly Garnets and Emeralds. He strongly dislikes crime and dishonesty. If a pony is really getting on his nerves, he will let loose on them, even ironically cursing in the process. He cannot let another pony die, even if it seems like they deserve it.

Current Home: Ponyville, Equestria

Misc:
Garnet is married to the half-changeling Emerald Desires.

Garnet's House is located a few blocks down from the dead center of Ponyville.
The kitchen right when you walk in the door with the dining room directly neighboring it. Going through another entryway in the dining room takes you to the living room, a moderate sized room with a single couch, a chair in the corner, and a painting of himself facing the couch. In the hallway are three rooms. One of them is a room slightly larger than the living room containing numerous books. On the other side of the hallway, there is a small bathroom with shower and a supply closet. Upstairs, the first room to the left is Garnet's bedroom, which contains a double bed, a large drawer, and a painting of Garnet and his wife, Emerald Desires, on the wall facing the bedroom closet. Directly next door to the bedroom is another bedroom for their children. This room contains a single, smaller bed, a desk in the corner of the room, and a painting of their son and daughter. on the other side of the hallway is a room the same size as the library which holds all of Garnet and Emerald's artistic equipment.
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PostSubject: Re: OC Character Thread 2 (This thread is now locked, please use the OC Character Thread 3 above)   Thu Jun 11, 2015 8:40 pm

Hey ho, everybody! I'm not, in fact, dead! (Although Sharp may have kicked me back into the forum to increase membership on his thread o3o) Anyway, take this character. Enjoy it. But not too much, there's no need to make a mess.
Name:Mechana Gears

Race:Earth Pony

Age:25

Mane:Her mane is a short, black affair, purposely cut that way to keep it on her head and out of her face, range of motion, and other such places where it might obstruct her work.

Coat:Her coat is kept in the same utilitarian style as her mane, and is, much to her chagrin, a very noticeable shade of pastel blue.

Cutie mark.: A hammer and sickle for the glory of the Soviet Engineering Forces Three interlocked gears, which is really annoying to her because the system is not actually a functional system. Three gears with locking teeth cannot turn. {INSERT RAGE HERE}

Extra details that aren't needed but are nice to add: Her favorite saying is "The light that burns twice as bright lasts half as long."

Distinguishing Features: What's distinguishing about her is just how plain she is. Although, in a world of energetic pastel ponies with brightly colored manes, perhaps she is distinguishing because she's on the low end of said spectrum.

Specialty (eg. special spells, unique powers etc): Her specialty is her ability to work with small contraptions without using weird unicorn telepathy hi-jinx.

Weaknesses: Her weakness is that she is very prone to being startled. It's easy to sneak up on her.

Occupation: Engineer

Gear: A toolkit. It contains a full set of wrenches, of which there are many types and sizes. It does not, however, have a 5-foot pipe wrench, because that would be silly.

History: Mechana's lived a pretty normal life, as far as being an engineer goes. Going to school, getting trained in the family business, all these things. She's essentially just another cog in the Glorious Soviet Motherland's Glorious Regime machine that is Equestria. She has, however, obtained some renown through various design competitions thanks to her engineering skill. Furthermore, Mechana has been known to light off large amounts of explosives, safely of course, for fun, much to the dismay of the constabulary.

Personality: She's very calm and collected. It takes a lot to fluster her. She makes decisions slowly, deliberately, and thinks everything through.

Current Home: Manehattan, but this is highly likely to change as threads demand it to.

Misc: She leaves her 5-foot pipe wrench at home, of course. Who would be crazy enough to lug that thing around all day?


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PostSubject: Re: OC Character Thread 2 (This thread is now locked, please use the OC Character Thread 3 above)   Fri Jun 12, 2015 2:35 am

retrosteamknight wrote:

Name: Garnet Desires

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PostSubject: Re: OC Character Thread 2 (This thread is now locked, please use the OC Character Thread 3 above)   Sat Jun 13, 2015 2:30 am


Name:Melon Blast
Race:Used to be human but is now a Pegasus.
Age:12
Mane:Lime green with a style like Fluttershy's.
Coat:Red
Cutie mark.:Game controller
Extra details that aren't needed but are nice to add:Tail is the same color but it's styled like Rarity's. Also they have blue glasses and blue eyes.
Distinguishing Features:They look like a watermelon.
Specialty (eg. special spells, unique powers etc):They have an amulet that allows them to use fire fists in hoof-to-hoof combat.
Weaknesses:The fire takes about one second to charge up, and can severely backfire if it is interrupted.
Occupation:none.
Gear:Amulet that looks like a blue flame, a Game Boy
History:They used to be a boy named Sean. Then the were sent to Equestria with no memory.
Personality:Very happy-go-lucky, with some prankster and some jokester.
Current Home:Technically dark alleyways because they spend most of their time there.
Misc:They're scared of a lot of things, but FNAF is what they fear the most.

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PostSubject: Re: OC Character Thread 2 (This thread is now locked, please use the OC Character Thread 3 above)   Sun Jun 14, 2015 12:13 pm

Name: Jamberry

Race: Changeling

Age: 25

Mane: Red

Coat: Chitinous

Extra details that aren't needed but are nice to add:

Distinguishing Features: Tends to have a canteen hanging from his neck.

Specialty (eg. special spells, unique powers etc): He knows basic magic skills and knows how to survive in the wilderness.

Weaknesses: Unlike most changelings, Jam can’t use his magic to change his appearance. He’s also very oblivious to the world around him sometimes.

Occupation: Wanderer

Gear: A canteen, a lighter, and a knife.

History: When Jam was little, he had been dropped on his head by some clumsy clutz. When Jam grew, he wasn’t able to do the things that other changelings did, which was change their appearance, and was always so happy. Being virtually useless to his hive, he was thrown out into Equestria to fend for himself at his young age.

Jam wandered as far away from his hive as he could that same day he was thrown out and tried to find somewhere where he’d fit in. During his wandering, he ran into a bear that didn’t take too kindly to him. He ran as fast as he could away from the bear, eventually tripping and falling down a hill. He rolled and ended up in a blackberry bush, lying there injured. He started to cry at his bad luck.

Fortunately for him, a wandering merchant couple walked by on a path. They both paused when they heard him crying and the stallion decided to investigate. He found Jam curled up in the blackberry bush, tangled up in the thorny branches. The stallion was wary for a moment. He heard tales about changelings, but he never thought he’d see one in person. His sympathy over took his wariness and he pulled Jam out of the bush with his magic. He then brought him over to his wife so she could treat his injuries.

When Jam was patched up, the couple asked what he was doing in a berry bush. Jam told them all about what had happened to him from being kicked out of his hive to the bear attack. The couple asked if Jam wanted to come with them and what his name was. He said yes and told them he never had a name. The couple decided to call him Jamberry because they found him in a berry bush. They took Jam out on their travels and thought him everything he needed, from basic magic to reading and writing.

As Jam got older and his “parents” stopped traveling, he wanted to go out and see more of the world he didn’t get to see with them. When he was old enough, he took a few bits with him and went out of their house and began wandering Equus. always sending letters back to his “parents.”

Personality: He’s cheery, optimistic, and tries to be funny. He likes meeting new ponies who like meeting him back and is a good friend.

Current Home: Wherever he stays for the night.

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PostSubject: Re: OC Character Thread 2 (This thread is now locked, please use the OC Character Thread 3 above)   Sun Jun 14, 2015 5:22 pm

Name: Evening Tide

Race: Pegasus

Age: 22

Mane: Short and maroon with thin bangs

Coat: Deep Blue and scruffy

Cutie mark.: A nautical compass

Extra details that aren't needed but are nice to add: Has emerald eyes and a shark bite mark on his leg

Distinguishing Features: has two scar like marks going down neck that reveal themselves to be gills when in water.

Specialty (eg. special spells, unique powers etc): Has the ability to breathe underwater and is a fantastic swimmer that's actually better at using his wings underwater than he is in the air.

Weaknesses: Has a small gait when he walks as the wound on his leg never healed right but after so many years its not as noticeable. Often talks out loud rather than thinking to himself. Will not stop talking when he's scared and just starts blurting things out. Is a normal Pegasus other than the breathing underwater thing.

Occupation: Biologist and Explorer, does field research for the royal canterlot archives. Also does photography on the side.

Gear: underwater camera, waterproof vest with pouches to keep his stuff in. Sometimes carries around a saber and pretends he's a pirate.

History: Was actually raised in canterlot with a noble family but didn't actually take to the high life very well and left as soon as the opportunity arose. He had an immense interest in the ocean and marine life and begged his parents to join a research team when he was 14 in a more of learn by observing kind of deal. It was to be a 2 month long voyage in which they observed the migration patterns of sharks. However, the boat was hit by an unexpected monsoon and capsized, as the ship capsized Eve was thrown about the ship and banged his head on the railing nearly knocking him unconscious and causing him to bleed from his head. Eve survived for 2days floating on a piece of debris from the ship before falling unconscious. The blood from his head finally caught the attention of one of the sharks who dragged him under. Luckily the debris from the ship had caught the attention of a school of seaponies who came by him on their way to check out the wreck.
Just as he was getting dragged underwater by the shark. The seaponies scared the shark away and saved Eves life. Among the group of seaponies was the recently turned seapony Hoofbeard the Ex-pirate who took pity on the poor lads fate and pleaded on behalf his behalf that Eve be given the ability to live underwater or else they had just delayed the inevitable. After a few stern glares from Hoofbeard's wife the other seaponies agreed and magiced him a pear of gills claiming that although they will let him live he did not choose the life of a seapony and so therefore cannot be one of them. Eve lived among the seaponies for 4 years exploring the ocean and learning how to swim masterfully with his wings before he finally was able to make his way back home.
Thought to be dead by all even, a tearful reunion awaited him back home where he discovered some of the crew had survived as well but it was only a couple. Even after the whole ordeal his love for exploration had only grown and 2 years later had gotten a job with celestias own archivists and now works as a field researcher exploring all over equestria and beyond.

Personality: He can sometimes be a little shy at first but is talkative and friendly once you get him going. He loves the ocean and exploring equestria in general. During the two days adrift he formed the habit of talking outloud to himself in order to force himself to stay awake, this habit however stuck with him and often thinks out loud which has gotten him in trouble with the locals on multiple occasion's. His greatest virtue is his honesty, though he will lie if absolutely necessary, he can still be honest to a fault preffering to avoid beating around the bush and just let the truth be heard and consequences be damned

Current Home: He owns an apartment in Canterlot but is rarely found there and is often flying around exploring equestria.

Misc: Was taught fencing techniques by Hoofbeard however everything he learned was taught underwater so he's still not very good at it.

Is bisexual although most would never know as he rarely reveals any outward signs of what sexuality he is.

Often fantasizes about becoming a sky pirate and joining Luna's lunar pirate crew and sailing the sky's all over the world.... In actuality he's really just fantasizing about Luna in a pirate outfit but he swears its the adventure he's interested in. (I imagine the Lunar pirates to be a popular book series in equestria, a work of fiction in the canon world of MLP much like daring do)


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PostSubject: Re: OC Character Thread 2 (This thread is now locked, please use the OC Character Thread 3 above)   Sun Jun 14, 2015 6:14 pm

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Name: Evening Tide

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PostSubject: Re: OC Character Thread 2 (This thread is now locked, please use the OC Character Thread 3 above)   Sun Jun 14, 2015 10:43 pm

Name: Klutzy Kokoon
Race: Changeling
Age: 16
Mane: No mane.
Coat: Black chitin.
Cutie mark.: None
Extra details that aren't needed but are nice to add: Normally walks around in his changeling form.
Distinguishing Features: Most of the time he has a small frown on his face. His forehead also looks slightly cracked.
Specialty (eg. special spells, unique powers etc): Changes his form by smacking his forehead.
Weaknesses: Is unable to change his form normally like other changelings. He also has no control over what he transforms into. Also suffers from constant headaches.
Occupation: None
Gear: None
History: Quite literally dropped on his head as a baby, Klutz didn't get his full name until his 12th birthday when he was to present himself to the Queen and show off his transformation skills. Upon utterly failing, he went to a nearby room to smack his head against a wall, which eventually, after several transformations, caused him to turn into a full grown dragon, utterly wrecking the hive. Since then he caused lots of trouble for the hive with his transformation klutziness, which eventually led to his banishment from the hive. Now he spends most of his time in his changeling form, fearful of being chased away with pitchforks and torches should he cause trouble.
Personality: Sort of a sad soul who wants to find his place in the world. He doesn't want to transform because he's come to associate the act of transforming with failure and imminent trouble. Thankfully he hasn't had to do that thing in years. But his current home is prone to weird things...
Current Home: Ponyville
Misc: He transforms back into his usual self after a period of 2 hours unless he transforms again during that time. He also acts like himself no matter what form. He won't try to impersonate anypony or deceive them by using his form.

Important: This is a joke OC! If approved, he will only be used for threads that allow joke OCs!

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PostSubject: Re: OC Character Thread 2 (This thread is now locked, please use the OC Character Thread 3 above)   Mon Jun 15, 2015 12:29 am

Name: Tulip Twist

Race: Unicorn

Age: 23

Mane: forest green with lime green highlights style wavy

Coat: a cream mint color

Cutie mark.: 2 tulips 1 right side up one upside down with a 260 balloon linking them

Extra details that aren’t needed but are nice to add: olive green eyes

Distinguishing Features: she typically goes around town with a balloon hat and or balloon dress of her own making

Specialty (eg. special spells, unique powers etc): extreme balloon twisting can make any thing out of balloons

Weaknesses: needle ( yes both because of her job and because she hates shots and blood tests and pony will have to hold her down. Donuts give her bad luck and will do almost anything to avoid them and she loves apple soda a bit too much she's been known to drink 5 bottles in one sitting.

Occupation:balloon twister. Party decor expectert

Gear: ?

History:Tulip Twist was born to earth pony parents, her father was a member of the earthpony guard would be gone every once in a while, her mother was a stay at home mom and would keep encouraging her daughter to explore and use her Imagination. Tulip would love it when her father came home he would help her with her school work and take her fishing she didn’t have a cutie mark for all of her school years so she was bullied relentlessly.  As soon as she discovered her talent she moved out on her own and began her own business making balloon animals for children and balloon décor for parties which is how she became acquainted with Pinkie Pie and is now Pinkie’s go to balloon twister

Personality:withdrawn to ponies she first meets but as soon as you get to know her she’s an outgoing yet smart pony.Likes: apple soda, designing new balloons, traveling to different parts of Equestria, studying culture, a good Mystery book or game, Puzzles, singing, Animals (especially birds), and Dancing

Dislikes: negative criticism (constructive criticism is fine with her, just don’t point out flaws just bring down the work she doesn’t take it well) Needles (yeah I mean shots she gets very sick to her stomach) Bullying, Donuts (yeah don’t ask I know it’s weird), girly things, and being forced to be prim and proper

Current Home: ponyville

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PostSubject: Re: OC Character Thread 2 (This thread is now locked, please use the OC Character Thread 3 above)   Mon Jun 15, 2015 3:27 am

Star Sentinel wrote:
Name: Jamberry

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PostSubject: Re: OC Character Thread 2 (This thread is now locked, please use the OC Character Thread 3 above)   Mon Jun 15, 2015 3:30 am

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Name: Klutzy Kokoon
Important: This is a joke OC! If approved, he will only be used for threads that allow joke OCs!

...you and Star are WAY too in-tune...

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PostSubject: Re: OC Character Thread 2 (This thread is now locked, please use the OC Character Thread 3 above)   Mon Jun 15, 2015 3:32 am

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Name: Tulip Twist

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PostSubject: Re: OC Character Thread 2 (This thread is now locked, please use the OC Character Thread 3 above)   Tue Jun 16, 2015 3:23 pm

Name: Dream Sickle but prefers Icee
Race: Unicorn, mare.
Age: 26
Mane: Aquamarine Style short except for one portion of her mane which is white in addition  is longer and in front of her face.
Coat: Azure
Cutie mark.: on snowflake with a a wave behind it. Icee's mark (not my creation)
Extra details that aren't needed but are nice to add: The small white portion of her hair smells like vanilla.
Distinguishing Features:
Specialty (eg. special spells, unique powers etc): Can breath snow and turn it to ice. She can also form the ice to shapes. If it calls for it she could also turn them to icicles and use them to fight.
Weaknesses:Doesn't take well to critics but yet who does. Although she can't get a cold she does get fevers more. Has a hard time keeping a romantic relationship(most ponies don't find a blast of snow to the face, romantic.) When she hot, her snow turn to water. turning her to a pretty much a pony water gun.
Occupation: Ice sculpture (sells her works for weddings,parties, anything that wants an ice sculpture.)
Gear: Has a pair of ice skates in her saddle bag.
History: B orn to a family of unicorns her life was pretty normal. esip for one thing her home town being near a mountaintop the town always had snow, to most it it was a pain. But, Sickle never saw an issue with it. Snow ball fights, snow ponies, hiding in piles of snow and jump scaring ponies, all that kind of stuff, she was into. "Don't stay out in the snow too long or you catch a cold." She would hear her mom constantly remind her. Even though she never got sick, her body just didn't like the heat. One day during school every thing seen be going fine example of one thing Sickle sneezed. This being weird for her since this is the first time in 8 years she sneezed, also the sneeze, coat the classroom and mates with a blanket of snow. She might of got 2 week detention. but she got her cutie mark. As the years pass ponies started to leave town eventually the town became more barren and in ruins eventually, Dream sickle join them and left town. She moved to Vanhoover, Cold enough for her to work there, but not to busy that she becomes too big of a celebrity. She hasn't kept in touch with her family since doesn't have the slightest idea where they went off to. Her greatest accomplishment was have one of her works at the grand galloping gale, Until "the pink one" destroyed it.  
Personality: An little immature for her age but she claim it to be a kid at heart. She open to friends and has no problem making them. When she gets mad she could get a little too harsh with her words. She like being happy and likes when other are happy, so she doesn't deal with downers.
Current Home: Small house in Vanhoover
Misc: She HATES all thing Disney and Guess Why!
Also not a fan of her original name (gives so ponies the wrong idea of her talent) or ice puns (unless she does them.)
Will make an path of ice to skate on, If she board and/or lazy to walk.
Has a fear of phoenixes. "It a bird the blows up and burst to flames how do you not freak out"
even though she love winter her favorite holiday is Nightmare night.
Her goal in life is to find that special some pony to share her life in. (F.Y.I she bisexual)
Surprisingly enough she a huge metal and dubstep fan.
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PostSubject: Re: OC Character Thread 2 (This thread is now locked, please use the OC Character Thread 3 above)   Wed Jun 17, 2015 1:36 am

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Name: Ampere "Amp" Spudger

Race: Earth pony

Age: 55

Mane: Yellow

Coat: Red

Cutie mark.: Open chrome toolbox filled to the brim with a mishmash of tools, cables, and circuit boards.

Extra details that aren't needed but are nice to add: This mare has a tendency to smile often. Orange eyes.

Distinguishing Features: Often seen wearing round glasses, and sometimes wears either blue overalls with a matching cap or a white lab coat while at work.

Specialty (eg. special spells, unique powers etc): A tried and true mechanical engineer, as well as a rather proficient inventor, programer, and researcher in the ways of magitechnology and chemistry. Can generally pilot/control some of her more ambitious projects well enough... after the usual trial and error. Her husband has helped her become more of a grease monkey herself through working and living together for so long. Hot Blooded will.

Weaknesses: She truly is a peppy mare, but she is still an aging mare whose strength and stamina can only take her so far. Tasks requiring extra force of labor will certainly take their toll on her, even if it involves something she can theoretically deal with herself through knowledge. A non-combatant overall by herself, though underestimating her as a coward is a mistake as she WILL defend herself. Her greatest regret is never being able to have offspring to pass her knowledge onto, or that her beloved husband could have a chance to be a father.

Occupation: Officially retired as an engineer for the best R&D company in Vanhoover, she still works back with them on and off site through commissions. Some by old friends, some by interested investors, and some for the sake of improving older concepts time and time again. Fully intent on making her own private R&D company some day as she works on her own self-imposed projects.

Gear: Mainly, computing maintenance tools. General purpose experimental utility belt, and experimental utility watch.

History: Born and raised by a fairly average but well off family in Manehattan, she would prove herself to be quite the smart young lass in school growing up over the years as she always seemed to be a step ahead of most academically. As time went on, she attained an affinity for making small but complex toy models with ease, as well as skip a few grades with her intellect, always cheerily studying and fiddling with her hooves, eagerly sharing her passion with others any chance she could. Eventually, she had moved with her family out of the rather noisy ambience that was the ever developing Manehattan, and went over to the quieter, smaller, but still developing city of Vanhoover to further her studies, and then specialize in engineering. She also had a strong fascination with comic book heroes and epic heroes of Equestrian history.

Between her studies and her soon quickly professional level of work, she would soon hold the distinction of being among the first to develop computer technology in Equestria for more common use later on, which opened more possibilities in terms of research and studying, as well as speeding up her own growing ambitions and projects, and allowing her the time to broaden her knowledge further; Including making larger complex animatronic toys among other inventions made of superior metals and alloys.

It was during these prime years that she would meet a fairly rugged looking handsome stallion who would then become the love of her life as he, coming from seemingly nowhere within her circle of friends and co-workers, lent his support when she truly went all out on her work and no others could keep up but him no matter what. When work ended, their time together would soon blossom to passionate fun and learning. Their marriage would surprise no one with how much they got along and spent time together.

Later on still, her research would take on a somewhat different focus than to simply improve upon things as she noticed events that would alter the lives of many time and time again. Return of lost monarchs, living legends running amok, supreme magical beings and relics being unleashed reminded her of something: Some way, some how, the alicorns, unicorns, and pegasi were often the ones making the really significant changes compared to the Earth ponies and their affinity for just the land. She did envy their influence, but more than that she saw it as a challenge of her intellect. She'd come to hear what the Magic of Friendship had brought to the land, but with the events of Tirek in particular, she had finally come to a decision: She would devote more of her time so that Magic alone would not have to bear the burden of righteousness and justice for the greater good; Muscle would also play a part, she thought as she'd contact for aid on the matter. Muscle... in the form of her Super Robot projects... She always did like her toys...

Personality: Generally lively, hearty, and a great supporter for new ideas, be they magical or otherwise. Always has the belief that magical and weather controlling creatures can be matched if not surpassed by the Earth ponies. It's all one big challenge to her. May have a bad habit of wanting to share, or show off, her newest inventions to others... for better or worse.

Current Home: Private compound in the outskirts of Vanhoover, perfect for making her personal projects unhampered.

Misc: Main Theme

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Name: Ford "Grease Monkey" Wrench

Race: Saddle Arabian

Age: 50

Mane: Purple

Coat: Green

Extra details that aren't needed but are nice to add: This stallion's mane and tail are rather short and curly, and has a thick bushy moustache that more often than not covers his mouth even as he speaks. Blue eyes, and bushy brows that lend a constant shadow to them.

Distinguishing Features: Is very often seen smoking from his wooden corncob pipe. Often wears blue overalls or white overalls with matching caps while at work. The fact he's a Saddle Arabian makes him distinctly tall and exotic compared to the average pony.

Specialty (eg. special spells, unique powers etc): A true handystallion. Just about anything involving physical labor is right under his proficiency, but he truly shines when it comes to the dirtier jobs. If he's not covered in oil, smudge, splinters, grime, or burns somewhere on his body at the end of the day, it's a slow lazy day. Years spent with his wife has boosted his knowledge on technology to where he can try to keep up with her magitechnobable at least, as well as maintain delicate equipment with more ease. Often the number 1 co-pilot of his wife's more ambitious projects. Adamantly stoic.

Weaknesses: As great as he is with tools and sharp with his mind, he's never truly had a fully-fledged education which means certain subjects will just fly over his head due to his early upbringing. His wife helped remedy some of it, but matters of history, geography, literature, and pop culture often eludes him. Sometimes feels burdened with the thought of never being able to have foals with his beloved wife despite their attempts.

Occupation: Still active as a general purpose handystallion in the city of Vanhoover, but the more his wife has taken to self-imposed projects, the less he's been going to tend to others as time goes on to show his support and help with her projects.

Gear: Toolbox, toolbelt, experimental utility watch made by the wife.

History: He was born in Saddle Arabia, but barely lived there long as his family immigrated to Vanhoover for a better shot at life since his parents would see opportunity to be gained in a developing location before he was barely able to walk straight on all fours. They were right in a way, but schooling for him would come mostly from his mother at home only, while his father did his best to constantly show him the family trade of being a handystallion every chance he could, teaching him the importance of hard and honest work constantly.

Life was hard from him growing up. He could not get along too well with many of the youths, not because he was foreign, or because he could not speak much of the same language at first, but because a home-schooled handystallion in the making that was more often than not working instead of having fun to earn his keep and that of the family. Fortunately, he was good with his hooves at carving objects of his choosing. It brought him peace, as did smoking with a pipe given by his father further on to deal with the stressful but fulfilling work easier.

Things would take a drastic turn in his early adulthood and life in general however when he'd take his father's place in getting a job at a prestigious institute when the elder fell ill and couldn't take the job himself. It was there he met the would-be love of his life... as she practically drafted him to work for her long hours time after time after literally dragging him into the institute as she was always busy with something when they met up, and he happened to be the only one available to keep up with her busybody ways and demands for manual labor where as many of the others simply could not keep up with her seemingly endless energy.

At first, he thought he'd just have to put up with a crazy eccentric mare for some bits, but soon he'd learn that the more he worked for her and the institute, the more he'd come to enjoy it. He learned to appreciate that she was just like him, working to their very best of their abilities for a goal, as well as respect that her projects were almost always with others in mind as he'd come to learn since she'd speak with him during their time together, even if he usually kept quiet. Plus, he found much of her end results to be quite fascinating time and again, even if he didn't fully understand what they were for but how they were made between them. While he had always liked the jobs he did in some fashion or other, it wasn't until he worked with her that he learned to really enjoy the work being done, just because she was actually fun to be around and keep up with.

What truly came as a surprise to him though, was how he'd come to learn something about her that she would not do for most anyone else. She'd slow down and make time for him in ways only her family ever seemed to get from her. Most notably, whenever they were done with work, and he'd get to carving figurines from wood, while she sat next to him and watched. It never mattered how long he took, she'd always watch from beginning to end as they met early on. He'd also come to learn that she was actually quite the big shot among students, as she was far ahead of most with several graduating titles to her name already that most would struggle to get in one go, and she was still a spry young adult at the time that was also already taking jobs from outside. The biggest of all surprises though? Her willingness to accompany him for the occasional dinner with his family, even when she and others of her league were getting praise and nominations for their continued contributions to society that she would pass on. Their marriage would come as no surprise, since no one appreciated his work more than his wife, plus it also meant they could get their own place and live together and spend their spare time further learning from one another, and having fun building things on their spare time, even if that meant taking risks along her as her number 1 assistant in experiments.

Much of his life was straightforward compared to the innovative wife who always looked for new ways to make things better, but even he would notice some of her worries, and all it took was a single evening to comprehend what her worries were regarding events in the land. He didn't fully understand some of the problems as she saw them, but he knew one thing when he finally learned what her next big project was going to be about: She was going to try and make some changes, and was asking for his help most of all. He thought and told her it was the single most insane idea she had ever come up with... and was more than ready to help her out with her Super Robot projects... Because at the end of it all, he always did like playing with the toys they made...

Personality: Generally a quiet sort, patient, focused, and an admirer of hard work. Likes to brag that none smile more than his wife while at work than him, but whether he's joking or not is hard to tell when his moustache always covers his mouth.

Current Home: A private compound in the outskirts of Vanhoover, perfect for the safety of others to keep them away from some of the more dangerous projects.

Misc: Main Theme


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PostSubject: Re: OC Character Thread 2 (This thread is now locked, please use the OC Character Thread 3 above)   Wed Jun 17, 2015 4:07 pm

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Name: Dream Sickle but prefers Icee

I'm sorry, we already have an Icee. Wink

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Misc: She HATES all thing Disney and Guess Why!

Then she should be very pleased that Disney does not exist in Equestria. Wink Not gonna ask you to take this out because it's so nonsensical and funny, just be aware that your character hates something that does not exist, at least to them.

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(F.Y.I she bisexual)

Most girls are, it seems... Wink

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Surprisingly enough she a huge metal and dubstep fan.

Metal men are gentlemanly as shit. So I strongly approve of Dream Sickle's decisions in this regard. Smile


As you can tell, I enjoyed commenting on this (the first thing about us already having an Icee was a joke, if that wasn't clear) but I see no problems with it. Approved. Smile
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PostSubject: Re: OC Character Thread 2 (This thread is now locked, please use the OC Character Thread 3 above)   Wed Jun 17, 2015 4:50 pm

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Name: Ampere "Amp" Spudger

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Name: Ford "Grease Monkey" Wrench

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PostSubject: Re: OC Character Thread 2 (This thread is now locked, please use the OC Character Thread 3 above)   Thu Jun 18, 2015 12:55 am

Name: Cotton Candy

Race: Thestral

Age: 26

Mane: Blue, Fluttershy's length but slightly messy

Coat: Fluffy. Very fluffy. Pink.

Cutie mark.: A rainbow-coloured hat, similar to Applejack's Stetson hat.

Distinguishing Features: She is well-known in her community due to her social nature. She's also a bloodsucking thestral, but only trusted friends actually know this in particular.

Specialty (eg. special spells, unique powers etc): She is really good at making hats.

Weaknesses: She is susceptible to heartbreak. If someone important to her leaves her, bad things can happen as she's prone to emotional breakdowns.

Occupation: She owns a hat shop. (City varies per canon)

Gear: Lots of hats.

History: Cotton Candy was born as the daughter of parents socially prominent in her place of birth that they had settled in, and life with them growing up had been good early on. They, however, were also bloodsuckers as she was. When discovered of this fact, they were relentlessly chased out of Equestria, mistaken for monsters, while Cotton was forced to stay behind in hiding for a time. The locals didn't know the filly was vampiric as she hid it well, and remained to live on normally among them. In time, she became well-known with the local ponies for her friendliness, which let her make a living in peace from there onwards.

Personality: She is very bubbly and energetic, but not always understanding. While she tries to be, it doesn't quite work. She's similar to Pinkie Pie, I suppose, except more huggy and less party-y.

Current Home: She usually has a bedroom attached to her store, whose location varies depending on the canon.

Misc: She's cute. The fact she's a bloodsucker has to do with her being based on the actual bloodsucking Vampire bats, not the supernatural monster vampires of lore.


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PostSubject: Re: OC Character Thread 2 (This thread is now locked, please use the OC Character Thread 3 above)   Thu Jun 18, 2015 7:10 am

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Name: Cotton Candy

Approved.

As an aside, I viewed your original sheet prior to all refinements and edits and the only changes I'd have suggested or sought clarification about was in some of your wording. The character as originally written was just fine, but thanks for giving it an extra coat of polish. Smile
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PostSubject: My OC: Mokuba.   Thu Jun 18, 2015 7:42 pm

Name: Mokuba

Race: Alicorn

Age: 9

Mane: Grey, Long

Coat: Dark Blue

Cutie mark.: A star With a sword across it, what it does is relive the prophecy, fighting, and star alliance when obtained.

Distinguishing Features: The first alicorn prince, winner of 3 fighting tournaments, poet and writer at heart.

Specialty: Starlight Magic (created by him), Sword combat.

Weaknesses: Chaotic Darkness, Soul Stones, Ancient Magic Gems

Occupation: Prince, Fighter, Adventure

Gear: Summonable Key-blade

History: A prophecy was once told about a young alicorn filly would fall from the sky and rise to defeat the darkness that broke loose from a galactic void known as, "The Void of Shadows." That prophecy was once an ancient belief, but to others, the prophecy was just a myth. Years had passed, and the myth died off. Until one night in the equistera known today, in Pony-Ville, a meteor shower was going on, and the main 6 watched on from the castle they lived in, until they saw a fast meteor heading for the outside of their castle, and crashed there. They found out it wasn't a meteor, but it was a filly, who's name was Mokuba. Mokuba was in a coma when he crashed, and they brought him in. Hours passed, and he woke up very slowly. He was Greeted By Twilight and her friends, and they helped him heal. When Celestia, Luna, and Cadence met him, they found out that he was a part of a prophecy told long ago, and he needed to train up and rely on Twilight and Her friends. Months passed by, Training was complete, and the Darkness from The Void Of Shadows came. Twilight and her friends tried to fight it off with the elements of harmony, but it was not powerful enough, Mokuba joined in and used his starlight magic along side the elemental beam from the elements. They defeated the darkness using the powers of the elements and the powers of starlight magic. He now fights to protect others, and is currently a prince!

Personality: Serious at times, Gentle, Calm.

Current Home: The Crystal Empire, With Shining Armor and Cadence.

Misc: Can go in different forms, like a saiyan.
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PostSubject: Re: OC Character Thread 2 (This thread is now locked, please use the OC Character Thread 3 above)   Thu Jun 18, 2015 8:53 pm

Mokuba: Hero-Of-Legend wrote:
Name: Mokuba

Race: Alicorn

Age: 9

OK, so he's an alicorn foal. This could work.

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Cutie mark.: A star With a sword across it

Neat.

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what it does is relive the prophecy, fighting, and star alliance when obtained

...what...? It... cutie marks are pictures on your flanks, they don't do anything.

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Distinguishing Features: The first alicorn prince

Of what nation?

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winner of 3 fighting tournaments

..at AGE NINE?

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poet and writer at heart.

...he's 9...

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Specialty: Starlight Magic (created by him)

OK, now he's the kid of Twilight Sparkle?

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Sword combat.

...but he's nine...

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Weaknesses: Chaotic Darkness

...he... what? What does this mean?

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Soul Stones

...this isn't Elder Scrolls, Mokuba

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Ancient Magic Gems

OK, so, new magic gems don't bother him. Good to know.

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Occupation: Prince

Being a prince is a hereditary monarchical position, not an occupation.

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Fighter, Adventure

Nine. He's nine years old. As in one year short of ten.

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Gear: Summonable Key-blade

You ripped off Kingdom Hearts too?

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...and the main 6 watched on from the castle they lived in...

Oh, OK, so he's not related to Twilight.

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until they saw a fast meteor heading for the outside of their castle, and crashed there

Destroying most of Ponyville in the process and killing them instantly. Because that's what meteors do.

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They found out it wasn't a meteor...

Oh, OK.

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...but it was a filly, who's name was Mokuba.

...the alicorn prince is a girl...?

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Months passed by, Training was complete, and the Darkness from The Void Of Shadows came.

...but... but... nine... Nine years old. NINE.

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Twilight and her friends tried to fight it off with the elements of harmony, but it was not powerful enough

...the Elements of Harmony are a magical superweapon that can imprison what amounts to a GOD. What the hell?

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Mokuba joined in and used his starlight magic along side the elemental beam from the elements.

OK, so the Green Ranger added his Dragon Dagger to the Power Rangers' blaster. OK, makes sense to me.

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He now fights to protect others, and is currently a prince!

...Oh, OK. Celestia adopted him.

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Current Home: The Crystal Empire, With Shining Armor and Cadence.

...so Cadence adopted him...?

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Misc: Can go in different forms, like a saiyan.

...so... he's over 9000...


I'm deeply, deeply sorry for my mocking and inconsiderate tone through this entire sheet but this... this is a mess.
1. Alicorns are heavily restricted in this group and have to be severely limited in power.
2. Cutie marks do not do anything other than indicating special talent. There is some indication from the season 5 opener that they have some kind of metaphysical significance beyond that, but the specifics are not clear. Regardless, they do not do what you describe.
3. I suppose that being an alicorn automatically makes him a prince, but of what lineage? What of the three kingdoms in the show (Equestria, Twilight's Kingdom. and the Crystal Empire) is he a prince of?
4. He's nine. He cannot possibly have even been PART of a fighting tournament, much less won one, much less won three.
5. Unless you imagine his writing and poetry skills to be very, very rough, then he's no writer OR a poet.
6. You cannot create your own magic. This has happened ONCE in canon and only through the efforts of a unicorn so powerful as to be essentially unique.
7. He cannot specialize in sword combat at age 9.
8. What the absolute hell is chaotic darkness and how is it a weakness?
9. What the absolute hell are soul stones, and how are they a weakness?
10. What the absolute hell are ancient magic gems and how are they a weakness?
11. Being a prince is an inhered position in an monarchy. It is not a profession.
12. At age nine, he cannot have an occupation, much less being a fighter and adventurer.
13. Giving him a keyblade is a direct and explicit rip-off of another series and universe. This is never, ever acceptable. The only instance of this sort of thing being acceptable was when it was indirect and when the player in question inserted enough of their own creative work to make it based on an existing universe rather than an explicit copy.
14. This prophecy is such an obvious contrivance to bypass all the deep issues with this character that I'm going to say no to it.
15. He fell from the sky. No, no, and hell no. Unless you create an actual origin story for this, it can't even get into the same universe as acceptable.
16. Filly is a term used for a female pony child. A male is a colt.
17. A short training montage to magically give him the skills to defeat some kind of vague cosmic threatening force is not acceptable. He's a CHILD.
18. Not a single thing was specified about this threat. What it could do, where it came from, or anything. It's a clearly invented threat for a horrifically overpowered character to defeat to prove how badass he is.
19. The Elements of Harmony are a magical superweapon that represent the strongest magical force on the planet. Especially after their upgrade with rainbow force colors, the show has made it clear that they are an order of magnitude more powerful than the entire magical power of all ponies in existence combined, including all four princesses. There is no possible way that your character is powerful enough to add a crucial power boost to a weapon on this scale.
20. As to the saiyan comparison, this is actually the most revealing part of this entire sheet. By comparing your character to an impossibly powerful race, you pretty much expose that this character is meant to be so powerful as to dominate any thread and any situation. This kind of character cannot be allowed.

This is so badly broken that I cannot imagine any way to fix it. I'm afraid you'll have to start from scratch and collect help and advice from the admins of the site, whose names and contact information is on the front page.
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PostSubject: Re: OC Character Thread 2 (This thread is now locked, please use the OC Character Thread 3 above)   Sat Jun 20, 2015 7:52 pm

Name: Silver Blade

Race: Pegasus

Age: 24

Mane: Silver with white streaks, kept short; same goes with tail

Coat: Dark grey, white muzzle and his right forehoof is also white

Cutie mark.: A dagger with a silver blade and a purple ribbon around the hilt (handle)

Extra details that aren't needed but are nice to add: He has purple eyes, the same purple as the ribbon of his cutie mark and the ribbon he wears on his dagger.
Because of his profession, a blacksmith, he is strong and almost always covered in soot, coloring him black.

Distinguishing Features: His purple eyes and his discolored muzzle and hoof. Aside from that, not much really.

Specialty (eg. special spells, unique powers etc): He is very proficient in swordfighting and hoof-to-hoofcombat. He is stronger than the average pegasus.

Weaknesses: When he gets angry, he can lose his control. And when he’s lost control, he often makes mistakes. He has a bad habit of running away from his problems, never really confronting them.

Occupation: Blacksmith

Gear: Belt with his weapons, a special sheath for his dagger, his saddlebags with his belongings.
His dagger, is a story apart. It was enchanted by a warlock, who would later become his mentor. (see history). It is enchanted to stay in his hoof (he learned how to properly hold an un-enchanted sword on a later age), and only he can pick it up with his hooves. It would always slip out of other’s grips, be it magical or hooves. It cannot hurt its owner and it will always return to him - not actively fly back to him, but if he ever lost it or it would be stolen, he would always find it again. It is near-unbreakable and doesn’t require much maintenance.

His other weapons are ordinary. He prefers his dagger over any other weapon.

History: As a colt, Silver helped his father, Forged Blade, anytime he could. He was a blacksmith as well. He learned Silver every aspect of making day-to-day objects, as well as weapons and blades. He didn’t learn to use them, though. That day came when his father was commissioned a dagger, made of the strongest and purest silver, that is to be enchanted by a warlock. The commissioner - who, to this day, remained anonymous - had sent his apprentice to pick up the blade and bring it to the warlock, but he never arrived.

Eventually, the warlock went to pick the dagger up himself. After hearing of the fate of the commissioner and his apprentice, he asked Silver and his family if he would be interested in learning how to wield a blade. Of course, Silver said yes, and after a bit of convincing his parents agreed to it as well. And so, the warlock enchanted the dagger to be Silver’s. Over the course of a few weeks, the warlock started to train Silver how to properly handle the dagger, learning him everything the dagger could do and what he could do with the dagger.

But he didn’t get his cutiemark until one day, when the attackers of the commissioner and his apprentice tracked down the Warlock. They had almost killed Silver’s mother and had severely wounded his father, but Silver picked up the dagger and desperately tried to defend himself and his parents. He tried everything the warlock has learned so far - and finally, he disarmed the attackers and they fled, promising to come back one time for the warlock. But the warlock had disappeared during the fight.

All that he left was a purple ribbon, that had tied itself to the dagger, and a note tied on the other end. ‘Find me’, the note read, and as he picked up the dagger again, his cutie mark appeared. Thankfully, his parents fully recovered and kept working in the blacksmith until he became an adult, and all that time he kept up his abilities in swordfighting and combat. Once he had finished his schooling, he travelled from place to place, trying to find his friend and mentor, the Warlock. When he wasn’t searching, he would set up his own blacksmith or work in one until he was certain the warlock wasn’t there. This could range from a few weeks to months or even years. He hasn’t found his mentor yet.

Personality: He is adventurous, always curious. This could get him in a lot of trouble. He does know when to get serious. He is silent near strangers, but more open with ponies he knows. It takes time for him to warm up to new ponies. He isn’t very talkative, even with friends, and when he talks he is always the voice of reason. When he gets angry, really angry, he can lose his control and sometimes go even so far as to kill. He immediately regrets these outbursts and runs. He always runs from his problems, and he prefers never to go back to the town he’s lived in, even if there were happy memories there. The only place he’d go back to is his parent’s home.

Current Home: A small town outside of Manehattan.

Misc: His favorite color is purple.


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